Help with College Essay

Hi everyone!

I was wondering if anyone here has a couple of minutes to skim through my college essay and give me a couple of suggestions on how to improve it. I already gave it to my college counselor but would really like to hear another perspective on it. I’m an international student from Montenegro and I wrote about my fight against corruption in the country.

I would really appreciate it if anyone could give me a hand and send me a couple of comments.

Thanks :slight_smile: