<p>I've got 168 words. 168 words that I'm convinced all connect to each other in a beautiful way [at least by my standards] such that to remove any word at this point either makes a sentence awkward or corrupts the literary effect of the sentence. Nobody in a college adcom will really notice or fuss over this, will they?</p>
<p>Anyone want to look over it, while on the topic, to see if any part of it just doesn't interest you to the extent where you feel the essay could work without it? Or if you decide to tell me the essay just doesn't work :), that's fine too.</p>