<p>My essay seems to dramatic and to much of a childish story and I found out it can't be a dramatic story since its a statement. Yet, my expository reading and writing teacher said it was alright. Yet, its worrying me! So can someone please help me fix it or if theirs something I should add to it. Sorry if its so long! Thank you so much!</p>
<p>Prompt:
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>
<p>Essay:
In the Jungle
Soft hums of the animals were heard. Along with the flutters of butterflies and the chirping of the birds. Lush green trees, bright colored flowers filled the grounds. This was the jungle, an area so vast filled with all types of different things. Today, I was on an adventure to explore the outskirts of the jungle. The outskirts were an area I had never been and was told it was a dangerous place. Wearing my brown boots, equipped with my backpack I had ventured on into my journey. The sound of crunching leaves below my feet and the rustling of the trees and plants as I had passed them filled my ears.
As I continued my way a black hole had caught my eye in the distance. As I drew closer and closer it wasn't a hole it was a cave! I drew out my flashlight and slowly walked into the gaping hole. The sound of soft snoring could be heard. The light shone on four large figures. Feet? Ears? a...Tail? My eyes couldn't believe it I had found tigers! There was a mother and three cubs. Yet, they had seemed frail and weak. SNAP! I looked down, I had accidently stepped on a branch! My eyes rose into the eyes of the awoken mother, her stunning green eyes petrified me. She stepped closer and closer to me! I turned around, running for my life!
The giant stomps of the mother had slowly diminished as I ran faster and faster. Yet, I felt it was the end of our encounter, I knew from the look of their bodies they weren't in the best condition. I wasn't going to give up just yet. I had saved so many different birds, turtles, fishes, and other animals. I feel as though I am one with the animals, that I should take the responsibility on taking care of any animal in need. That was my goal to help these tigers, to nurture them to great health, even if it risks my own life!
My bag, filled with cans of chicken, a large water bottle, and bowls. I shone my flashlight back into the cave and saw the eyes of the cubs and the mother. Three green eyes and one orange eyes, they watched my every move. Then from that day on I left food for them each and every day they were at that cave. I stood outside the cave with patience in the hot burning sun to the cold nights, watching as they ate. It's been months and still no love from the tigers. Then it compelled me to reach my hand out and as I did I would look away, avoiding their eyes. Fur was felt between my fingers. I looked up, it was the mother. She was thanking me for her help, we became extremely close as if her and her cubs were a part of my family now.
I came back to the cave as I've being doing so for months now. Yet, this time was different. The mother was gone and so was one of her cubs. I searched everywhere, checking for any footprints, listening to every sound! Yet, they were never to be found, left with only her two cubs. I decided to take them home and bring them into my family. In reality, there was no jungle, just a backyard. The cave was just a hole in my backyard porch, and for the tigers, they were just stray cats. Even if it wasn't an exciting adventure like how the story was, I still worked hard every day to get those cats to like me! I knew ever since I was little I wanted to become a veterinarian. Then I became huge advocate for animals and the environment. I volunteered at Petsmarts, saved so many different types of animals lives, became a secretary for a club named Triunite where we help poverty, cancer, and the environment. As well as I have great leadership skilled. I became super involved in Link Crew and Student Achievement. Today, I still miss Momma kitty, which is the name of the lost mother cat. She holds a special place in my heart forever. As well as I still have her two cubs today. The work I put in for these cats has definitely paid off and I couldn't have been more glad to have them in my life.</p>