I really need help....

<p>I wrote an essay for the common app which I will be sending to a lot of schools. I had a teacher read it and tried to get some help but all she did was give me really vague, general ideas which really didn't help too much... Would anyone with some experience be willing to read my essay and give me some advice? I DON'T want it to be anyone applying this year. Thanks, and please post here or shoot me a PM</p>