inferring about yourself or talking about your self

<p>I've noticed that there are two types of essays... </p>

<p>One in which someone talks about a specific event which is described in detail as it might be in a work of fiction, and then is followed by a short analysis of it's meaning. This seems to me like a piece of writing in which the reader is to infer your personality from a part of your life.

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My friends call me "Banana Girl": Yellow skin on the outside and white on the inside. At times, I think I'm not Asian anymore, such as during the fish-ball incident. A while ago, my mother sagely predicted that it wouldn't be long before hamburgers and pizza would be a big part of my diet (they already represent two of my four daily food groups). "No problem for me," I said. I was okay with that. "Nothing wrong with being 'Americanized'," I thought. What people don't understand is that, although I am well adapted to America's culture, I still greatly respect Chinese traditions.

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ie: Sample</a> College Essay: Yvonne's Penn Submission</p>

<p>The second is talking about who you are as a person, and using an event as a piece of support and background rather than using it as a main focus.

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Not surprisingly, music has emerged as another, perhaps indirect, avenue for me to communicate with others. Singing allows me to convey my deep and personal emotions with others. When I sing, I am transported to another realm. The mundane everyday world around me disappears, and I am enveloped in my own, new space, especially when I am performing onstage. When I act, I am transformed, feeling the happiness, sadness, impishness, or even confusion that my character feels. My performance taps into that part of me where those qualities dwell, and I love sharing it with my audience. Music is a very special form of communication for me.

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ie: College</a> Essay: "What I Overcame"</p>

<p>Is the second type of essay riskier? I am somewhat worried by the fact that most essays follow the first style. I can't seem to find a way to write a good essay that is like the first type and it feels forced when I do try. I have teachers that tell me that I should run with an anecdotal type essay and not to be idealistic or self-centered.</p>

<p>I heard from the Yale Adcom that they like to read essays that are from the hearts of their applicants. The “perfect” essay might be a terrible screw-up for you. </p>

<p>The essay should reflect you as a person, so don’t let the trends influence you!</p>

<p>jliu I’m having the same problem. I’m concerned that the second option, which of course I find easier to write, is more “telling” than “showing”. I don’t know what to do…</p>

<p>does anyone have any advice.</p>