Is anyone willing to look over the common app short answer for me?

College Essays
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<p>I would greatly appreciate anyone who can help me revise my common app short answer about an EC.</p>

<p>I have it at 175 words. Any comments on grammar or style or things to cut would be helpful.</p>

<p>Again, thank you.</p>

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<p>Sure. I'll gladly take a look</p>