Is compromise always the best solution? [SAT Essay]

<p>(Hi all. Please do me a favor and grade my SAT practice essay. Please do grade on a scale of 1-6, as the SAT graders do. Please do not hesitate to point out mistakes as well as advice on how I can improve my work. I have typed it verbatim, and I have noticed several mistakes myself as I typed. )</p>

<p>Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>

<p>We are frequently told that compromise is the best way for people to work out their differences. When people compromise, with each side losing a little in order to reach a satisfactory agreement, both sides can continue to live in harmony. However, compromise can work only when the issues at stake are not that important. Compromise does not work when there is a genuine difference of opinion about strongly held principles or ideas.</p>

<p>Assignment:</p>

<p>Is compromise always the best way to resolve a conflict? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

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<p>Keen observation will reveal one thing about the world in which we reside today. If we have indeed found in compromise, the best solution to conflict, the world of terror, fear, international suspicion and animosity is rather devoid of it. Compromise, in my view, might serve as an effective measure to put a stop to a limited range of conflicts, but it is by no means capable of resolving all the conflicts that we encounter.</p>

<p>The betraying weakness of compromise can be seen in situations that do not have a win-win resolution. The Treaty of Versailles, and the British Appeasement policy, which were among the factors that led cumulatively to World War Two, are historical examples that stand as testimony to the graves consequences that arise from making compromises that are not favorable to both parties. </p>

<p>The failure of compromise as an effective solution is also seen in its inability to reconcile parties with clearly divergent mindsets. A notable example that comes to mind is the perennial debate surrounding abortion, with both the pro-life and pro-choice camps adamantly refusing to compromise any part of their personal sets of beliefs, which are deeply entrenched in their personal value systems. </p>

<p>It is an unfortunate yet inescapable truth of our existence that the moral and legal standards of other men are in conflict with our own. What is to us, an unforgivable and heartless action can be to another a perfectly rational decision with a justifiable outcome, as evidenced by the gruesome beheading of the journalist Daniel Pearl. Of what use then, in the face of such divergent mindsets, is compromise?</p>

<p>It is undeniably true that compromise has its place in our world. In fact, daily conflicts around us are peacefully resolved with compromise, and both parties are able to leave with smile on their faces. However, in our imperfect world of violence, mistrust, ideological clashes and extremism, one must keep in mind the fragility and the shortcomings of the human race. It is only on such a day when those weaknesses can be eradicated that one can declare compromise to be the solution to all our conflicts.</p>

<p>Nice prose and good ending. I am assuming the mistakes you made are simply typos.</p>

<p>It's really hard to grade it on a scale of 1-6. I'd give it a 5.</p>

<p>Try to explain your examples a bit more. The examiner might know, for example, who Daniel Pearl was. You could reduce the number of examples to 2, and then do a good job explicating them.</p>

<p>Good Luck!</p>

<p>I would give it a 4. Thought you had nice prose, you did not develop your examples. You could even used two examples and developed them. To develop an example write the initial situation, the change the example made, and the effects the change had.</p>

<p>Your first sentence is wack due to your comma use.</p>

<p>3 or 4.
Doesn't take a firm stand.
Badly developed examples. Have you seen some of the examples in the 12 Essay thread? You pass off a single sentence with no detail, "gruesome beheading of the journalist Daniel Pearl", as an example.</p>

<p>My comments:
1. This is too unrealistic for a timed, 25-minute written essay.
2. I agree with the above; you need to write in greater detail.</p>

<p>Seriously. The SAT essay doesn't need to use great diction. I used average diction and average syntax but developed my examples, so I got a 12.</p>

<p>^ I used horrible diction and developed my examples in the most mediocre, incoherent, and redundant way possible, and still got an 11. Everyone here's too harsh, seriously.</p>

<p>Though you obviously should've explained your examples more, I wouldn't be surprised if this essay would get a 10 or 11 on the real thing.</p>

<p>maybe a 4 or 5. honestly, you dont have to sound so intelligent in the sat essay. Just use a couple SAT words here and there, BUT expand on your examples more. Also, write till the last line. I got a 12 that way.</p>

<p>@ rockermcr</p>

<p>I believe your diction could have been the difference between 12. Of course, I haven't seen your essay but I'm willing to bet that if you filled out the essay to sound a bit more impressive, you could've squeezed that point (if you already used the transition rule and counterargument). After the October SAT where I basically wrote down a jumble of things and tried to glue them together but with intelligent diction, I received a 12 which consolidates my belief that the scorers are only superficially going through your essays.</p>

<p>No, look through my post history and find the threads where I asked people to grade my essays. Find the worst one. The essay I wrote on the Oct SAT was at least twice as bad.</p>

<p>Also, I think a lot of you seem to forget that two graders read your essays. One of the two who read mine gave me a 6, while the other gave me a 5 (6+5=11). Had I been lucky enough to get two graders who thought my essay merited a 6, I could've easily got a 12. Just like I could've also got a 10 if my two graders thought my essay deserved a 5.</p>

<p>Thanks all for your replies. The main purpose of such threads is for me to develop on my essay writing skills, with the help of you guys at CC. So, feel free to be as harsh and as frank as possible. It's my first attempt at an SAT-style essay and I'm already learning from you people.</p>

<p>@Hurt: it was written in 25 minutes timed.</p>

<p>I did this prompt. got a 12.
o_o</p>

<p>a word of advice: body paragraphs like that will get you no where. you have to connect it your your thesis. i'd give it a 4.</p>

<p>I got an 11 on this prompt. I only used two examples but i developed them very well. Word of advice: stick with 2, because 3 will just force you to rush.</p>

<p>8/12</p>