Is my essay too cliche??

Hi, I’m applying SCEA to Princeton this year and I was wondering if my supplement seemed too cliche. Would someone be willing to read my essay? I’d prefer senior posters and people who aren’t applying this year.

Prompt:

In addition to the essay you have written for the Common Application, please write an essay of about 500 words (no more than 650 words and no less than 250 words). Using one of the themes below as a starting point, write about a person, event or experience that helped you define one of your values or in some way changed how you approach the world. Please do not repeat, in full or in part, the essay you wrote for the Common Application.

“Princeton in the Nation’s Service” was the title of a speech given by Woodrow Wilson on the 150th anniversary of the University. It became the unofficial Princeton motto and was expanded for the University’s 250th anniversary to “Princeton in the nation’s service and in the service of all nations.” Woodrow Wilson, Princeton Class of 1879, served on the faculty and was Princeton’s president from 1902–1910.

Thanks in advance!

Um, what was the theme you choose?

@bjkmom I chose the “Princeton in the Nation’s Service” one (second chunk of text in the prompt) and talked about a hygiene drive I organized in my community.

We can’t tell you if your essay is too cliche without ever seeing your essay

@dessie411 Oh I asked if people would be interested in reading it. Sorry if that wasn’t clear!

If you want to send it over, I’l take a look