Just wondering if this is the right approach to take with the short essay on the common app (“In the space provided below, please describe which of these activities (extracurricular and personal activities or work experience) has had the most meaning for you and why;” 150 words or fewer).
I tried to keep it brief and yet personal (to some extent), but I’m wondering if i actually accomplished that. Should I take out the anecdotal-esque beginning and focus on exactly what i do as founder and editor, etc. to impress more? I guess I’m trying to emphasize my initiative and will to assimilate cultures. Pathetically I’ve written about four variations, and have decided to go to a higher authority…CC…
I’d appreciate all constructive criticism.
In the middle of a chilly December night, I found myself unable to sleep; after having spent the day with my Peruvian, Indian, Chinese, and Native American friends, my thoughts wouldnt stray from how hidden this kind of diversity seemed at school. I dreamt that night of starting an independent newspaper, one that would consist entirely of volunteers writing to foster a sense of community outside Oklahoma. Almost a year has passed, and Ive managed to found exactly what I envisioned one winters night: a compilation of often over a dozen varied voices discussing issues other than football championships, like immigrant janitor interviews or Black History month. Though schedules, tests, and life do create complications, I could never have imagined such an exciting and truly inspiring method of communicating global perspectives and events in an otherwise isolated town, especially considering the overwhelmingly positive response from friends, teachers, and family.