<p>As most of you know I am slightly below the curve for most schools I am appyling to so I was just looking for some tips on making my essay stand out. For Georgetown I started with a line about my childhood idol Patrick Ewing, for Michigan I mentioned the Fab Five to start off, are these good ideas to catch there eye? I do get to the point right after, and write all that fancy stuff that they like, but I also wanna show I'm just an average guy and I can be funny, and a good person in my essay.</p>
<p>"As most of you know I am slightly below the curve for most schools I am appyling to..."
Is this why you're trying to lie about your ECs?</p>
<p>Yes, but I have decided not to, I just need an edge, but that wasn't the question anyway. Either stick to the topic or pm me, I would appreciate the help from anybody, and I have done a lot of research about many schools so I am willing to talk to you as well if you have any q's for me.</p>
<p>I honestly hope some college admissions people are reading this so they know which essay is yours so they can check your ECs.</p>
<p>Like I said, I will not lie, I'm convinced, can we PLEASE stick to the topic???</p>
<p>I'm sorry but has OP edited his post or something? cuz I don't see where he says he'll lie about EC.</p>
<p>The subject was carried over from a different thread but I believe we can drop it now.</p>
<p>You can somewhat shift the direction of your essay to say that one thing that makes you unique is the fact that you are average, something like this:</p>
<p>"Think of an average person. He is neither smart nor stupid; there are equal number of people who are smarter and stupider than him exisiting in the World. IQ of 100, he fits right in the middle of the bell curve of intelligence, or anything in that matter. He possesses no extraordinary ability yet he is able to think in a logical way, just like any other people. He thinks, walks, and acts like any ordinary person, and he lives just about the most typical lifestyle that any normal people can live. Ironically, it is rather difficult to find such an average person. Fortunately enough, right in front of you is an essay written by a person who is "gifted(?)" with such a rare trait: the ordinariness."</p>
<p>Now if you can correct numerous amount of grammatic errors and diction, you'll get an interesting and somewhat humorous introduction to your essay.</p>
<p>one problem to the above introduction is that it basically gives away that you have no special talent or characteristic... so nvm.. i suk :(</p>
<p>MeyerLansky, first off, nice name. I wouldn't mess with you with a name like that ;) I don't think mentioning Patrick Ewing or the Fab Five would be too original. If anything, it is somewhat cliche. For some people, those are the only things they know about Georgetown and Michigan. Maybe you could take the opposite approach and mention some quirky facts about those universities that only a person who has done their research would know. Just a suggestion.</p>
<p>Yea I am trying to do some research about the shcools that looks great if mention it. I notice some business schools focus issues like globalization, poverty, etc, that seems like a great thing to add in your assay right? Yea Meyer Lansky was crazy haha</p>
<p>For dhl thats a pretty good intro actually, I doubt I'll use it but I'll defnitely put it in my back pocket. As for the special talents part, what makes me really stand out is my knowledge about politics. I know virtually everything, more than most history professors actually, but it would seem like bragging to come out and say that so I'm looking for a better way to incorporate it into my essay. I did mention how I spend countless hours reading and resaerching online, but anybody can say that.</p>
<p>I agree with QNY girl. </p>
<p>And anyways, you're supposed to write about yourself, not the school! Unless it's a "why I want to attend" essay, it's supposed to be about you. The school already knows about themselves...</p>
<p>And on the topic of lying about EC's (I'm sorry, I can't let it go...), want an edge? EARN IT.</p>
<p>"you're supposed to write about yourself... the schools already know about themselves."</p>
<p>i agree 100%... i don't know anything about your history, as far as lying about EC's goes, but i'm assuming that anyone who's that desperate to be admitted must be looking at submitting a pretty dull application. if that's the case, i'd recommend going with an intro that's something like dhl's suggestion. play up your shortcomings instead of trying to cover them up with gimmicks - admissions officers read hundreds of "i'm so great because..." letters, so if anything, being the kid that hasn't figured out how to save the world yet is your hook.</p>