<p>I goin' to take SAT in december but I haven't written any SAT essay until now. So, I would appreciate it if you will grade my essay.(but not written 25 min.)</p>
<p>"Is the world changing for better?"</p>
<p>When we look at the progress of the world through the last two centuries,we cannot state that the conditions of the world is ameliorating since those times. Several examples from our modern world clearly demonstrates that world's progression is not toward the positive side of way.</p>
<p>As wee see from recent war between U.S and Iraq, circumstances in the Earth are becoming less and less favorable for mankind, in this case for muslims citizens of Iraq and American soldiers functioning there. Everyday, we hear heartbreaking news about bombs blasting in every city and every street of Iraq giving end to hundreds or even thousands of lives of innocent people just because of mismanagement in internal affairs and several other political errors made by country. According to the Opinion Research Business survey, casualty number in Iraq war has reached the 1,220,000 by the end of 2007. Therefore,it would be absolutely wrong to think the Earth's nowadays as the flourishing times for humanity.</p>
<p>Another reason of world's negative advance is the global warming caused by continuous release of greenhouse gases since the Industrial Revolution. Global warming results from excessive accumulation of greenhouse,which are normally present in the atmosphere and function as heat retainers in order to stabilize temperature on Earth. These gases, including carbon dioxide and nitric oxide, are discharged steadily from various factories from all over the world and enhance the greenhouse effect by furthering heat built-up in the atmosphere.Consequences of global warming are indeed significant for life on Earth; for instance,they change climate patterns and result in glacial melting which can considered as serious threat to life. So, continuous broadening in impact areas of global warming doesn't give positive insights about fate of the Earth in the future. </p>
<p>After careful analysis of global warming and Iraq war, it can be easily concluded that current trends in the don't give us hints to think of promising future for the Earth, at least for next few decades.</p>
<p>Note: Yup, you can some traces of "how to write 12 essay in 10 days" in my essay,but i don't think this one would get 12 in the actual exam. :D</p>
<p>Numerous? You can sit down and count if you want
Personally I think if you don’t make those mistakes, with this structure, those examples, this style, etc, you’ll probably get an 8 (am I too strict?).</p>
<p>First, pay more attention to your grammar. I think in your essay, you inadvertently made those stupid mistakes. Whatever; you have to (and must) use correct language before you can use good or beautiful language.
The second thing is up to you Analyze your example as deeply as possible. Don’t miss any chance to tell the graders that “Yes, I have great insight!”. You don’t have to work with a lot of examples, 1 is perfect, 2 is okay.</p>
<p>I think if I were to write an essay for this prompt, my arguments would be: Example of Alfred Nobel.
_ At first, he dedicated his life to science because he loved it, he wanted to make it flourished: It’s a change for the better. Generally those contributions of the scientists unquestionably play a great role in bettering our lives.
_ However his invention of dynamite was used as a weapon. In general, behind a good thing, there is always a threat. We people cannot avoid those negative aspects.
_ Even so, we have to bear it in order to move to a higher stage of development. We cannot refuse the role of dynamite in our lives, especially in mining. Alfred Nobel himself did feel terrible about the fact that his invention for good was being used for war, and dedicated all his fortune to found a prize named after him. In general, we do regret and try our best to fix it. Human again learns some valuable lessons: the world’s truly changing for the better.</p>
<p>I have to admit that I’m inexperienced in SAT writing. Even so, as far as I know, one must go deeper into an example and deduce something that reflects your level of thinking in order to get a score higher than 8.</p>
<p>By the way, I just want to remind you that SAT is just a test provided by a service, that’s all. And the graders are hired to do their job, so be practical. I find that writing with this formula may bring you good chance to get a high score:
1/ Opening: State a strong/impressive premise
2/ Body: 1-2 example(s) and concise analysis
3/ Conclusion: Impressive conclusion
Don’t use too much big words, but avoiding SAT words is not a good choice. Anyway I think with the average length of an essay (about 350 words), they may just spend about 2 minutes to read and grade, so I guess they just skim for meaningful sentences which contain big words like a machine (the same thing happens in graduation examination in my country too).</p>
