my supplement needs help!!

<p>i just finished my supplemental essay
the promt is as usual: how will you contribute the school's vitality?</p>

<p>I really need people to critique, thx..</p>

<p>I’ll read it, PM me.</p>

<p>Pm me too. Is this your first draft?</p>

<p>bumpbumpbump</p>

<p>I’ll critique/read</p>

<p>anyone else, pls pls</p>