My UC personal statement so far

<p>Growing up, I was fortunate enough to have the “necessary foundation” as my dad would say. I had a home, food, and, most importantly, a family. My needs and wants were met; my doubts and low self-esteem were rectified and my goals were limitless. I had all the time in the world to live my life and, most importantly, do well in school and pursue my dreams. Nothing was in my way, mentally or physically, and I had the will power to do what was necessary to attain my goals. However, even with that mindset growing up, pressure and stress soon rose as I progressed up high school. Maintaining my GPA, taking rigorous classes, and allocating time for my extracurricular activities and free time were all stressful. But what had the most impact on me was when I saw my SAT scores for the first time.
I remembered that day like it was yesterday. It was a couple weeks after I had taken my first SAT during the May of my junior year. The time had come to see what I had gotten. Walking to my high school library to check my score, I felt nervous yet it was that kind of nervous that you know would have a positive outcome. I reassured myself that I prepared myself the best I could and tried my very best on the day of the test.</p>

<p>Remove the first paragraph. Seems vague and philosophical.</p>

<p>Oh btw, your topic is too original. Most people write about their SAT scores and grades. Try to stay away from that.</p>

<p>@ harrixor o.o Do you mean un-original?</p>

<p>Yes, it is not very original… I assure you there are PLENTY of students that will be writing about academics.</p>

<p>Honestly, I would recommend you not to write about academic unless you have some interesting twist within the story.</p>

<p>I agree, they have already seen anything they could possibly want to know regarding transcript/scores…give them a peek into some other areas of your life or they will think the SATs are everything.</p>

<p>I talked with the admission officer of vanderblit and he told me to write about taking tests, getiing low score etc. only if it is very very meaningful or unique. These topics are so common that they were written in a completely different era. Now they are ‘outdated’ as well as trite topics,</p>

<p>Write about some hobby or something. Don’t write about SAT unless like its funny/unique. I know that at my old school, the fire alarm went off when they were taking the SAT, and they just auto canceled everyone’s score. He wrote about that.</p>