Need Essay Editor (plz? ur my last hope)

<p>Can someone take a look at my common app essay. Any comments/advice/suggestions or grammar watever would be greatly appreciated! I didn't have the chance to give it to any teacher, so you would be a godsend to help me out right now! Thx!! Btw, I can look at your essay also if you want. Thx again!</p>

<p>------anyone?</p>

<p>bump.. cmon ppl</p>

<p>I could take a look...</p>

<p>Me too......</p>

<p>thx! anyone else?</p>