Need feedbacks/critiques on my application essay please!

<p>Would anyone (preferably in college or graduates) look over one of my essays please, I really would like some opinions that are apart from my friends/family.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>I would be happy to take a look. I have a B.A. from Stanford and a J.D. from Harvard. Since joining CC, I have provided essay comments on 46 drafts for 24 students. If you would like to get started, PM me!
JP</p>

<p>Hi- how do you pm? I would like to send you my essay too!</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>