<p>Can you guys tell me if these sentences make sense? some of my friends are saying it doesnt and i cant see why! If it doesnt, can you recommend which word i should use? </p>
<p>[IMPAIRED] I was already impaired and on a lower status than my friends, who were already American citizens</p>
<p>[IMPETUS] During all these incidents, I had allowed the card to place a barrier between myself and my abilities, rather than having it act as an impetus. </p>
<p>AND now, i want to know a better word to replace some of my words! Please help!</p>
<p>I loathe myself for lacking the shining beacon of achievement that many of my friends readily boast about.
*I want to say exactly this, but i want to express that i dont necessary "hate" myself in such a strong word. I want to say i feel ashamed, regretful, etc.. Those kinda feeling not hating myself... Can you help me fix it?</p>
<p>Yet, my parents could not afford her college tuition, and was forced to attend a community college.
- does this make sense? I cant stop thinking about how the last part " and was forced…" doesnt reflect back to who my parents could not afford the college tuition to.</p>
<p>They both make technical sense, but you have inelegantly used both words.</p>
<p>“I was already impaired and on a lower status than my friends, who were already American citizen.”</p>
<p>Are you trying to say that you were disadvantaged because you didn’t have American citizenship? While I disagree with the content (who says lacking a country’s citizenship makes one “impaired” and “on a lower status”), if you want to say it more clearly then an option is: “Unfortunately, I had a disadvantage my friends did not: I lacked American citizenship.”</p>
<p>“During all these incidents, I had allowed the card to place a barrier between myself and my abilities, rather than having it act as an impetus.”</p>
<p>It would be nice to have context for this one. I’ll give it a shot (it is, again, it’s a fairly haphazard sentence): “I allowed the card to obstruct my ability, rather than using it as a means to transcend my circumstances.” Again, I wrote it very generally because I have no clue what “these incidents” are, or what “the card” is.</p>
<p>Best of luck.</p>