<p>the pluto and the brazil ones are DEFINITELY with the diary imporving one. I know because I didn't have a writing experimental.</p>
<p>k the diary passage one was about some guy who didn't know whether to trust his instincts right? He said he met two new friends and didn't get a good impression of them at first and he turned out to be right? I may be confusing the passages</p>
<p>yup^ exactly.</p>
<p>Question about the diary passage:</p>
<p>When we had to combine the two sentences about how people often mistrust their
own instincts even though their instincts are right.....what was their answer?</p>
<p>I think I was deciding between A and C or something like that....</p>
<p>Can you give the answer choices?
I think you were referring to 33?</p>
<p>I ended up choosing C I <strong><em>, however, </em></strong>_</p>
<p>I also chose C but i cant remember the choices</p>
<p>What did people get for the improving paragraphs sec. "Which sentence if removed, will help strengthen the focus of the passage" or something like that.</p>
<p>I chose the sentence that mentioned how he kept getting cramps... does anyone else remember?</p>
<p>Yeah, I chose D? It ws to remove sentence 4 (hand cramps)</p>
<p>^Yeah that is what I chose as well and I thought I got all of the improving paragraphs right...</p>
<p>^isn't the improving pagraph easy this time? XD i love it</p>
<p>^It was super easy. I think the entire writing was easy, but I think I probably missed 1 or 2.</p>
<p>The answer for removing the sentence was obviously hand cramps. The paragraphs always want to involve as small a number of ideas as possible and hand cramps was a completely new (and pointless) idea.</p>
<p>What was #33? the one that asked to revise a sentence.
A was Because ___<strong><em>, I chose to ignore it.
C was... I _</em></strong><strong>, however, _</strong>________</p>
<p>it was 31 i think..combining 2 sentences</p>
<p>I really don't think Brazil one is redundant since the first one mentions its population and second mentions its size geographically.</p>
<p>And i think i put "out of" for number 2
it didn't quite make sense</p>
<p>Hey what do you guys think an 11 essay with 3 wrong is? Thanks</p>
<p>740-760 I believe</p>
<p>Has the question about Standing in or standing ON Persepolis been resolved yet?</p>
<p>This is about the essay. Do the readers really look of accuracy of information when they read your essay. For example I used Cry, the Beloved Country as an example and I referred to Kumalo as the father, and Stephen Kumalo as the son (when it should have been Absalom) Is that all right? Also how important are conclusions. I didn't have enough time so I just kind of summed everything up in one sentence.</p>
<p>No one is going to do fact checking on your essay. Seriously... no worries there. Missing a conclusion is huge. They'll def. lower your score (prob. not consciously, but nonetheless it has an effect on the reader) just because the essay is incomplete. Get a typical 5-paragraph essay down...</p>