Okay, I finished it. Now I'm looking for some advice.

<p>PM ME if you want to read it.</p>

<p>I put the words/paragraphs in bold that I know need some editing. I put the slash mark (/) because I didn't know which of the two or three works better.</p>

<p>It's pretty long right now, but I'm sure it'll be a lot shorter once I delete some of the stuff in bold.</p>

<p>Hey I have time on my hands, PM me?</p>