<p>Post your essays so we can compare. Remember to upload it via a image hosting site other than the original CB link or it won't show</p>
<p>here's mine.
ps. if you don't like my handwriting, don't read :D
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<p>I actually like your handwriting, but I wish it was closer to the actual size. I can't even read my own essay.</p>
<p>it enlarges if you click on it.</p>
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It is persistence that determines a person’s success. By now we have all heard of the ‘Little Engine that Could. Well just as the Little Engine that Could pressed on while things were rough so have I. Persistence is the key to my success. Not only have I benefited from persistence but so have characters in literature. Hamlet, from Shakespeare’s Hamlet Prince of Denmark can also be seen as persistent. He successfully revenges his father’s death after many failed attempts. Persistency does not only apply to literature and personal experiences. It also applies to the media. Carrie Bradshaw from HBO’s Sex and the City is persistent in her pursuit of Big – her lover. In the end she is successful.
During SAT and AP season I am the most persistent person I know. When I first took the SATs, I scored a laughable 1900. To me accepting a 1900 meant accepting mediocrity. So I studied every day between June and October. One of my teachers even said to me, “Stephen, are you sleeping? You look terrible.” I quickly realized that I had not been sleeping. I was too busy studying for the SATs to sleep. In fact sleep was entirely out of the question. SO I spent my nights studying instead of sleeping. I poured countless hours into the SAT – hours I will never get back. I pressed on just like the Little Engine that Could. Finally, October 4th rolled around. It was my day to shine. I sat down for the SATs with great hubris. Seriously, my head could hardly fit through the door. I wound up scoring a 2300 on that SAT (lol that is such a lie.. I scored a 2020.) That is a 400 point improvement; an improvement that is largely due to my persistence. Thanks to my persistence I was able to overcome mediocrity and ultimately achieve success.
Just as I was diligent in my studies, Hamlet persistently tried to revenge his father. After many failed attempts he was finally able to murder his fathers murderer – Claudius. Claudius had poisoned Hamlet Senior in the garden. Hamlet Senior did not give up; not even in death. He appeared before Hamlet as an apparition and told him of Claudius’s wicked acts. Hamlet did not only want to murder Claudius, he also wanted to expose Claudius’s evil ways. Hamlet devised scheme after scheme to accomplish his goal. He organized a play, The Murder of Gonzago, (omg how did I remember that on test day…) that dealt with murder, treason, and betrayal to see how Claudius would react. Finally, Hamlet grew tired of his acts and envenomed a sword. He thrusted the sword into Claudius’s heart and made him drink a poisonous beverage. Hamlet finally succeeded in killing Claudius. His persistent efforts led to his success.
Carrie Bradshaw from HBO’s Sex and the City is also persistent in her efforts. Big, her lover, breaks up with her multiple times. One time he actually gets married to another woman. This infuriates Carrie. She constantly pushed herself onto him and was even caught in bed with Big by Big’s wife. This ultimately led to their divorce. After years of ‘on and off’ relationships, Carrie and Big finally marry. Her persistent pursuit of Big led to her ultimate success. Carrie and Big are now happily wed.
Persistence is what determines success, not ability. When determined we can achieve anything we put our hearts to. Persistence does not only apply to fictional characters, it applies to all of us. “If at first you don’t succeed try, try again” says the old adage. In the end persistence equals success.
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<p>this got a 12 hahahahhahahaaha.... wow it is really long how the hell did i write so much? and yes... i know that it was Laertes that envenomed the sword. i just didn't want to run out of room so i cut it a little short.</p>
