Perchance might someone read/critique my essay?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>I've been staring at it forever and I would really appreciate some fresh eyes!</p>

<p>(I'll PM it to you)</p>

<p>I know its longer than 500 words and I'm gonna shorten it some, but I've called the schools I'm really interested in and they all pretty much don't care as long as it's not senselessly babbling on.</p>

<p>Please be honest! I'm not looking for reassurance or compliments or anything, I just an opinion from someone else. </p>

<p>Does it make sense?</p>

<p>Thank you, I love you hahah</p>

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<p>I’d like to read it</p>

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<p>I want to read it. Don’t worry about plagiarism; I’m done with applications.</p>

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<p>You can send it to me if you want, but I can be critical. </p>

<p>Love you too, smoochybear. AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA</p>

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<p>send send send</p>

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<p>Ah! sorry! I’m renovating the whole thing! Would it be alright if i sent them when this overhaul is done?</p>

<p><3</p>

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<p>When you’re done, you can PM it to me :)</p>

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<p>You can PM it to me too! :)</p>