Please grade my SAT essay and give me feedback - exam next week!! urgent

<p>"Do people have to pay attention to mistakes in order to make progress?"</p>

<p>How can I improve?? Also, please don't crush my confidence... thanks :)</p>

<p>Words cannot express the extent to which people overlook mistakes. One should not, however, fall prey to the misconception that it is excusable to think that people do not have to pay attention to mistakes; in order to develop, we must analyze our mistakes. Therefore, our errors provide unadulterated reflections that help us make progress if we pay attention and improve using these errors as founding basis. Hence, it could be said with utmost confidence that people have to pay attention to mistakes to make progress. Several social and historical examples verify this claim.</p>

<p>We need look no further than our triumphant technological advances. The primary underlying fact about our existence is this – as long as we remain earthbound species and manage not to kill ourselves, there is a 100% chance of our eventual extinction. Our only defense to this is to develop by studying our mistakes. Our technological advances have risen because people/nations meticulously study errors made in history so that they are not repeated. In 1989, Canada and the USA constructed the world’s largest seismic-wave-logger that will measure pre-shock earthquakes. This design was based on an earlier version that failed due to its unstable structure. This example is significant and germane to the topic because it illustrates the importance of carefully examining every piece of error so that we can develop using them. Essentially, these errors mark the blue prints of development if we study them carefully.</p>

<p>Take as another example the play “nest” in which Heather Brooke meticulously constructs an archetypal failure, Charlie Townsed: he lives in a dilapidated home, and his business has failed. In analysis of Act I, it is evident that his professional failure is attributed to his carelessness in overlooking his errors. Charlie failed to realize that his reduction in profits was because of his method of salesmanship – he stuck to orthodoxy, which bored his customers – but Townsed failed to realize, let alone improve, his flaws. Eventually, Townsed’s lack of attention to his mistakes was a prescription for disaster. Heather Brooke wanted to illustrate that people must put great care and attention in their work for errors – they are the greatest teachers. If Townsed had studied his flaws, he could have climbed up to his potential unparalleled heights of success; he was actually a talented, but careless salesperson.</p>

<p>Furthermore, Einstein, father of innovation and “brainchild” of the E=mc2 formula, strongly believed that scientists must study flaws in their experiments or theories. His extraordinarily long career revolved around the trite maxim: “mistakes are the greatest teacher”. He utilized this in his experiments by carefully studying anomalies. In the end, he produced the “flawless” equation by studying and re-examining past mistakes. To this day, his laws and equations remain the founding basis of physics – it hasn’t been disproven. It is a surprise that Einstein once had trouble with developing his ideas as they were plagued with careless flaws.</p>

<p>An indisputable reality of life is that people need to pay attention to mistakes in order to progress and achieve success as an end product. In final analysis, studying flaws is the spark that will ignite the engines of development and success. As evidence for this claim comes from history to literature, it is universally accepted and should be enforced in all aspects of life.</p>

<p>Clearly >=10</p>

<p>what do you mean? over 10 or below 10?</p>

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<p>I also think your essay is good but it could benefit from a little simplification. Your biggest problem is trying to fit in too many vocabulary words, some of which don’t fit or don’t work - for example - unadulterated, triumphant, potential, trite and enforced</p>

<p>Nice job though</p>

<p>I agree. thanks CHD. what kind of “specific” adjustments can I make? btw sorry I saw your email few days ago but couldn’t find the correct time to reply as I don’t have much time with SATs and stuff (it’s next week >.<)</p>

<p>Here’s some specific adjustments . . .</p>

<p>Words cannot describe the extent to which people overlook mistakes. One should not, however, fall prey to the misconception that it is excusable for people to ignore mistakes; in order to develop, we must analyze our mistakes. Our errors provide useful input hat help us progress if we pay attention. Hence, it can be said with utmost confidence that people have to pay attention to mistakes to make progress. Several social and historical examples support this observation.</p>

<p>One important underlying fact about our existence is this – as long as we remain earthbound species and manage not to kill ourselves, there is a 100% chance of our eventual extinction. Our species’ only defense is to develop by studying our mistakes. Technological advances have been driven by people/nations that have meticulously studied errors so that they are not repeated. For example, in 1989, Canada and the USA constructed the world’s largest seismic-wave-logger to measure pre-shock earthquakes. The project’s design was based on an earlier version that failed due to an unstable structure. This example illustrates the importance of carefully examining every piece of data involving errors. Essentially, these errors can mark the blueprints of development if we study them carefully.</p>

<p>Take as another example the play “nest”, in which Heather Brooke meticulously constructs an archetypal failure, Charlie Townsend. Charlie lives in a dilapidated home and his business has failed. An analysis of Act I indicates that his professional failure is a result of his carelessness in overlooking his errors. Charlie failed to realize that his method of salesmanship led to a reduction in profits and he failed to improve his flaws. Eventually, Inevitably, Townsend’s lack of attention to his mistakes led to disaster. The author provided a strong example of why people must put great care and attention in correcting their errors. If Townsend had studied his flaws, he could have achieved unparalleled success since he was actually a talented salesman.</p>

<p>Albert Einstein, father of innovation and “brainchild” of the E=mc2 formula, strongly believed that scientists must study the flaws in their experiments or theories. His career revolved around the maxim: “mistakes are the greatest teacher”. He utilized this insight in his experiments by carefully studying anomalies. In the end, he produced his breakthrough equation by studying and re-examining past mistakes. To this day, his laws and equations remain the founding basis of physics – they haven’t been disproven. Einstein once had trouble with developing his ideas as they were plagued with careless flaws – but he used the flaws to improve his life and the understanding of future scientists.</p>

<p>An indisputable reality of life is that people need to pay attention to mistakes in order to progress and achieve success. In the final analysis, studying flaws is the spark that will ignite the engines of development and success. As we’ve learned from an analysis of technological advances, Charlie Townsend and Albert Einstein, flaws can lead to ruin if they do don’t lead to improvement, or greatness if they do.</p>

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<li> It could be better structurally.</li>
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<p>I like CHD’s.</p>