Please proofread my 722 word essay! first timer here.

College Essays
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<p>The essay's on who has impacted your life, and i've written about my grandma. I don't think it's a bad essay, but please give me some feedback. I'll accept anything, harsh or constructive.</p>

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<p>hmm, i'll take a read pm it over</p>

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<p>I have to write an essay about a parental figure and I was wondering if someone could proofread part of the essay for me (spelling, grammar...).
Here it is: </p>

<p>On the surface the cross symbolizes my mother’s dedication and belief in God. On Sunday morning, there are many others, like her, wearing a cross around their necks, but none of them look like hers. Just as there are variations in styles of crosses, there are different styles of parenting. Many parishioners have not succeeded in keeping their child involved with church; she has not had that problem. Her welcoming and compassionate nature has led to create humorous events and have served to teach a lesson in kindness to my brother and me.</p>

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<p>I'll give constructive helpful criticism. I'm a good editor, I think.</p>

<p>tigger<em>n</em>rabbit: You hijacked their thread. But...</p>

<p>On the surface, the cross symbolizes my mother’s dedication and belief in God. On Sunday mornings, there are many others, like her, wearing a cross around their necks, but none of them look like hers. Just as there are variations in styles of crosses, there are different styles of parenting. Many parishioners have not succeeded in keeping their child involved with church; she has not had that problem. Her welcoming and compassionate nature has led to create humorous events and have served to teach a lesson in kindness to my brother and me.</p>

<p>I think it's written quite well tigger. But, I feel like it tells very little about you other than the fact you take after your mother and that you're religious. Though, your style of writing is quite beautiful.</p>

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<p>"Her welcoming and compassionate nature has led to create humorous events and have served to teach a lesson in kindness to my brother and me."</p>

<p>Tigger, it should be "has served to teach..."
watch those tenses.</p>