Could someone read my essay - please? :D

<p>This is the common app essay - it could fit for either the choose your own topic, or the one experience and how it changed you prompt.
All comments and opinions welcomed</p>

<p>If anyone could help tighten some of the sentences up, because Im a bit over the word limit right now, Id appreciate it</p>

<p>Essay</p>

<pre><code>You wouldn’t believe it by looking at her, but my grandmother is a very insulting, and intimidating woman – all five feet, 114 pounds of her. I’ll never forget the time when I was visiting her at her senior home, and as I was trying to get the television remote to work, she said so politely, “Hey fat stuff, get the hell over here.”
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<p>It’s ironic how a disease that halted the development of a loved one, actually accelerated the development of myself. Sometimes I feel guilty saying it, but my grandmother’s dementia has actually helped me. By opening my eyes past the teenage spectrum, dementia has allowed me to live in a world that most others don’t understand, and as a result has allowed me to mature and develop in ways most teenagers can’t.
I remember an incident when my grandmother refused to get up after I took her out to dinner at Prospectors. “Sit down stupid face,” she’d say to me when I tried to get her up to leave. Needless to say, everyone in the restaurant began to stare – some even laughed. It would have been easy to feel embarrassed, and call my mom to come help and get my grandmother to leave.</p>

<p>But instead, I just sat back down with her and waited, for forty-five more minutes until she finally wanted to leave. The thing that dementia helped me realize is that love is unconditional: family trumps all. It certainly wasn’t the first time my grandmother caught the attention of others in public, and it definitely would not be the last. I can’t limit the quality and time I have with the people I love because I feel ashamed of what they do. My grandmother, through being the loud, insulting grandmother she is, taught me that loyalty is crucial for life; loyalty is forever. Because later that night when I dropped my grandmother off at her senior home, she said “I love you Robet”, a name, despite being slightly mispronounced, she didn’t call me for months; making me realize that loyalty, and unconditional love, even if it’s just for forty-five minutes, goes a long way.</p>

<p>In addition to showing me the importance of unconditional love and loyalty, despite the circumstances, my grandmother’s dementia helped me have a more lighthearted, yet mature outlook towards life. Spending time with my grandmother nearly every day helped me value the quality of life that I have. Despite losing her ability to think properly, act properly, and talk properly, she still has ability to be happy. After spending time with her, I find it challenging to get upset over my “problems”: having three papers due this week, not having enough money to buy a new video game. After being with people that have literally lost their minds, it’s a crime for me not to be happy, not to wake up every day with a smile on, just because I still have the privilege to know who I am.</p>

<p>Dementia taught me that if you’re going to stand by anyone, stand shamelessly; if you’re going to grow old, grow old with the people you love; and if you’re going to wake up today; wake up and live life to the fullest. Because even tomorrow was guaranteed, it’s not guaranteed to be better.</p>

<p>…10char</p>

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