I’m through my application. I have a friend who is a last minute moment in applying to colleges. LOL. He send me his essay (I think it’s explicit but missing something) but I think that CC’s posters and comments are a better guidance.
BTW: He said ignore grammar and punctuation mistakes because it was sent from his iPhone.
Common App: Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, please share your story.
"One would claim that a child who endures A life filled with misery ,resentment,and bights of disappointment;would find the rejuvenating enlightenment conveyed at the end of this cave impossible to grasp . What if that child secretes intellect , nicety, resolve ,and resilience?What if the immutability of his perceptions became malleable? And a hunger to become a connoisseur manifested . Could his endeavor be projected? I stand here today unbroken and unscathed by the interminable adversity carved on my skin -these tribal like tattoos do more than define who I am ,they tell my story … My 7th grade science teacher once told me "shoot for the stars ,to fail in pursuit of them ". That simple quote had a domino effect that rippled throughout my every step toward education . I dreamt to attend Harvard ,but failed to understand the importance of discipline . I was determine to engrave my print so deep into this rock, that it’ll overshadow every known intellect before me ;but my thoughts and ideals spoke louder then my consummations . It wasn’t till the end of my eleven grade year that I notice I was inconsistently shooting for Clouds ,and Failing in pursuit of them. As I looked down at my feet , I noticed I remained stagnant in this cave . That the rejuvenating enlightenment i wished to grasp still remained the same distance away . All this time I’ve been building every adjective imaginable to enable me to walk towards that breathe of fresh air. With every step the intervals amid them shorten ,And the fire burning deep within my soul propels me onward-A resolve. A passion .A fire parallel to Ben Carson complemented by the determination of Mandela.
Sent from my iPhone"
-Bray