plz critique this essay~

Chance Me / Match Me!
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<p>ya its pretty crappy...im going to be applying to bottom and mid ucs this fall...tell me wut u think</p>

<p>what personal quality can u bring to uc? (200 words)</p>

<p>I’m addicted to laughter. No, laughter’s now some new street name for crack, it is what it is, the purest most opiate form of happiness. Hearing this escape others' mouths gives me a high and the most indescribable joy. I need to make people laugh, I need to make people feel my elation.
It’s not that I’m the funniest guy in the world. You can’t put me in front of a crowd and make me perform stand up. I don’t have dashing wit or a charming sense of humor, but somehow laughter follows me wherever I go. How do I do this you ask? I know how to enjoy life. That’s my secret. I’ve been through a few adversities, few mistakes and some unproductive years. But I can honestly and proudly proclaim to you at this very moment, that I have enjoyed every single moment of it. I’ve tried my best to laugh, even through the worst. People around me seem to embrace this way of thinking, and laughter resonates.
A year before college, I stand before two huge double doors and on the other side lays the new and bigger world. What other causes for laughter await me on the other side? I can only anticipate what these doors may hold.</p>

<p>tyyty~</p>

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<p>bumpity bump~</p>

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<p>In the second sentence I believe you want the word "not" instead of "now"? I like the word opiate, it reminds me of opium and ties into your drug motif. I think this essay is fine since it is not the primary essay.</p>

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<p>thanx ^^ any more comments/ advice?</p>

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<p>bumpity~~~</p>

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<p>bump? any more input?</p>

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<p>Decent. A bit of repetition. Essay may end up seeming redundent to admissions, as they will probabaly receive many essays along the same lines.</p>