<p>Essay B: Describe the world you come from, for example your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?</p>
<p>How is this essay best handled? Describing family, clubs, schools, etc. all in one essay might lack the depth of focusing on one particular thing. Then again, it is a bit difficult to describe my whole world from just one club im part of or my family by itself. Does anyone have some advice? Maybe some examples of past essays?</p>
<p>I'm writing about my school for the essay; I come from a nontraditional environment and as such Essay B is a pretty interesting prompt for me to respond to. I don't think the essay prompt is asking for ALL of the things it lists; perhaps just a deep elaboration on one or two.</p>
<p>Noodles, please do not post any more links of that nature. If too many prospective applicants read that thing, the number of apps will probably fall off considerably. I hope my son never stumbles onto it.</p>
<p>That essay isn't that great at all. You guys can do way better! I'll bet that 90% or so of the essay the admissions officers read are exactly like that. Nothing too special.</p>
<p>brendank, how do you know that this essay isn't great? I think its pretty good for an MIT essay as it captures the writer's passion and activites he is involved in. do u have an example of a better one? I would really like to see it.</p>
<p>I don't think it's that great because it's not all that well written and the content just seems typical and normal for any engineering school applicant. When I read it, nothing really stood out to me and it was really passive.</p>
<p>heres that guys website
<a href="http://www.audiogeek.net/index2.html%5B/url%5D">http://www.audiogeek.net/index2.html</a>
Yeah i would say the activities stand out more than the quality of the essay itself. The part about the audiogeek business seemed a bit forced. From talking about building a simple amplifer to mentioning that he has this international cable company, he didnt really say much about it. Also, I think the essay seems to be more focused on himself than the actual world he comes from. I guess that wasnt a problem though?</p>
<p>I would have said that it was not very well written, and seemed to be trying too hard to be nonchalantly impressive. I thought it was a joke at first, trying to squeeze the max out of every last possible fact-dropping opportunity. It did not answer the prompt very well, IMO.</p>
<p>I'll bet y'all can do a lot better with whatever your own activities have been! A well-written memorable essay is a Good Thing.</p>
<p>O_<em>O. He has an orpheus headphone set. That **** is so ****ing expensive. I wonder if he made all of that money or if it was provided for him. If he made that amount of money, then props for him! O</em>O</p>
<p>EDIT: While his essay could have been a little better, it was the second app essay that I have been able to read through completely without thinking "oh god this is boring, I dont want to read this anymore".</p>