Review my Rice Perspective Essay please?

I’ve been really struggling on this essay, and although I think I have a pretty solid draft now, I’m not sure if it is fitting for the prompt… I would really appreciate some feedback, preferably from someone who has been through the admissions process at Rice and is familiar with what they are looking for in this prompt. Thanks!

i’m not very familiar with rice admissions, but i’ve written this type of “perspectives” essay several times for rice and other universities and think i have a good idea of what it should be like. feel free to pm me!