Rice perspective essay critique

<p>I will be applying to Rice as a transfer student for the fall semester. I am about 95% finished with the supplement perspective essay. I just need to write a conclusion paragraphy, but I have been hit with a bout of writers block. Hopefully, I can come up with something before the 15th! </p>

<p>I was in the military for five years so it is a fairly interesting read. Would anyone care to critique it for me?</p>

<p>I can take a look. PM it to me when it’s done.</p>

<p>I’d like to be the one. Please do PM me your works when you finished!</p>