<p>Bump, need to review more essays 4 the january sat</p>
<p>a very nice essay can give more essay like these plzz:)</p>
<p>Here you go, my introduction my tutor gave me.
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Dear Ladies and Gentlemen of the CollegeBoard founded in 1930 by Gaston Caperton to educate and inform the people of North America, welcome, to my essay.
While our world is not perfect, we all try. For example, imagine a world with pain. Imagine a world where people died and suffered. Imagine a world with starvation, where people need to eat and drink to live. Now stop imagining it. Because this is our world. Now, imagine [relate to prompt]</p>
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is good?</p>
<p>Massive waste of space. Sorry, but seriously don’t try this.</p>
<p>I second what 9jagurl96 said. I would strictly and kindly advice you not to try the introduction you are suggesting. I feel the introduction is just too flowery. If you take a look at AcademicHacker’s essay guide- "How to Write a 12 Essay in Just 10 days, you will realize that the first couple of words of your introduction is included in the four examples of very bad introductions.</p>
<p>Just my two cents… :)</p>
<p>it is amazing!!</p>
<p>Was the first essay in this thread really that good?
It was the essay about “heroes” in response to the prompt: Should we admire heroes but not celebrities.</p>
<p>The author wrote a lot about the importance of heroes as a moral compass for humanity in its present and future endeavours, but did he really answer the “…not celebrities” bit?</p>
<p>You’re right… I don’t think he did.</p>
<p>Yeah…half of it was an essay on “what are heroes”, the other half on “how they can help”…with some one-liner mentioning paris hilton…i dont see how that was a 12 for the question given.</p>
<p>man, yall sure about my essay? i spent a long time on it…</p>
<p>You don’t have to change your entire essay, just change your introduction.
However, I still strongly advice you to check out AcademicHacker’s essay guide.</p>
<p>Are people overly influenced by unrealistic claims and misleading images?</p>
<pre><code> A virtuoso in music, an icon in sports, and a deaf genius; sometime in these aspiring dynamics lives, someone somewhere told them they werent good enough, and someone told them they were. Its a universal concept: impractical, illogical, unrealistic; and it can only be deciphered if we look back at the past which defined its posterity.
Music Mogul Marshal Mathers is recognized as a virtuoso of the English language. Intellectuals swoon over his ability to bend words like they were made of rubber. He started with a single pipe-dream that grew from the words of those he looked up to. A mother addicted to valium, a hostile neighborhood, and an entire society screamed at him: you arent good enough. He responded yes I am, and became one of the most celebrated and influential hip-hop artists ever, all because he followed the rapper he looked up to.
Another quintessential figure that has become a household name was a boy who at the age of 14, locked himself in his room and cried after being cut from his sophomore basketball team. Michael Jordan won 6 NBA championships, and became known as one of the most iconic sports figure ever. The discouragement of his failure was overcome by the stars telling him he could do anything if he practiced enough, sweating blood for oil which would fuel his aspirations.
And Beethoven, a boy whose father told him he wasnt good enough, bent down on his floor and listened to the vibrations of the piano he took apart. He was a deaf, but he was also an idealist. His fathers discouraging voice was just another vibration attempting to tell him what he couldnt do.
Every great that has ever lived once faced discouraging rancor, but they also faced inspirational footsteps to follow. Unrealistic claims are what truly define our society.
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<p>Last day tips for essay???</p>
<p>Hey ! i was just curious, the essay must be written in 25minutes, how do you manage to write all your paragraphs with planning and what not?</p>
<p>How do you manage to write so much in 25minutessss?!?!?!</p>
<p>Alright, so here’s my essay. Since I live in New York City, my November SAT was postponed due to Hurricane Sandy and I believe that the SAT administered to those affected by the storm was different than the regular November SAT. Here I have my essay typed up exactly as it was written, without changes in spelling, formatting, punctuation, grammar, or the like.</p>
<p>Prompt:</p>
<p>Should people try to be as active and busy as they can, or should they try to have more free time for themselves? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>Essay:</p>
<pre><code> While free time may be enjoyable, more often than not, lazily slothing about leads to mental or physical stagnation and does not yield progress. Admittedly, the acts of daydreaming and appreciating nature, the joys of contemplation, can serve to give poeple breaks from their otherwise fast-paced lives, but these lapses of daydreaming and meandering are exactly that–breaks. Excessive resting is hardly beneficial and should be avoided; breaks must be taken in moderation. Acute analysis of historical as well as literary examples in context show that in the end, while free time can be rejuvenating, it is hard work which leads to self-cultivation and technological advancements.
In Shakespeare’s “Hamlet”, Hamlet, the protagonist of the play, remunerates far too frequently, and it is for this reason that his fate ends so tragically in death. Hamlet’s father has just recently been murdered by Claudius in Claudius’ conspiracy to overtake the throne, and the ghost of Hamlet’s father, King Hamlet, confirms Hamlet’s sinister suspicions and burdens Hamlet with the task of avenging King Hamlet’s death. Hamlet knows, of course, that he needs to kill Claudius, but instead of actively carry out his duty with efficiency and pointed alacrity, Hamlet dwells on the issue of the morality, or lack thereof, of taking anothers’ life, and thus wastes valuable time in which King Claudius secretly devises a plot to poison Hamlet. Too much free time is what leads to Hamlet’s eventual debacle–Claudius’ plan ends up successfully, and Hamlet is duped into King Claudius’ lethal trap.
Steve Jobs, on the other hand, used his time somewhat more productively, and this zeal for life and his sanguine nature is what allowed Jobs to earn his success–he personally benefited from his subsequent material wealth, but he also helped millions of people by donating altruistically to numerous charities as well as providing many with the electronic tools that they need to succeed. The Apple company did not rise from the dust from idea alone–it was a direct result of active determination to acheive a goal. Jobs’ motivation built him a company with billions of dollars in net worth–his hard work and his tedious labor earned him an enterprise which has helped millions of Americans alive. How many times in a day does one see people chatting on their Iphones, playing on their iPods or watching movies on their iPads? This number has become so increasingly large that it cannot even be counted.
Another example which shows that hard work yields desired results comes from my own personal observation of a friend. At lunch, this kid and classmate sits with seniors and teachers to interview them for a school newspaper article; during class, he jots down notes assiduously, even during his free periods he studies for a future test.
Evidently, free time can yield ephemeral boons, but in the long term it is always better to take action. Only with doing, not thinking and wondering, can innovation and progress be acheived.
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<p>Notes: I kind of **-ed the Hamlet section–I felt like the question of whether free time was a good thing was a topic which I was ill-prepared for, so since none of my prepared examples really worked I kind of just thought about people who were lazy and people who were hard-working.</p>
<p>Anyway, so I followed the general essay format–intro, three body paragraphs, conclusion–and it worked for me. My essay was quite boring in my honest opinion, but it got a 12. Let’s be real–if you’ve accessed this thread, you don’t care about originality or creativity–you just want a 12. So yeah, the standard essay format worked for me! Definitely use it if you want.</p>
<p>-bump-</p>
<p>it would suck for such a great collection of essays to go into oblivion</p>
<p>Hey guys, I just want to ask a question.</p>
<p>Whenever I read an 6 essay example in the BB or PR, I always find that their writing suck compared to mine and yours. Like the book’s essays is short, no vocab, and pretty general. While over here, to get a 12 means going deep into the question.</p>
<p>So what is the TRUE 12 essay? Somewhere in between?</p>
<p>Great thread! 8parks11 really blew my mind in how effective a natural writer can be.</p>
<p>@kimmylouie,
It is the one that “goes deep into the question”… Believe me.</p>