Hi guys !! I am preparing for the SAT.I wonder if you guys can help me with my essay and give me some feedbacks. Please grade my essay out of 12.
Prompt:
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.
In today’s complex society there are many activities and interests competing for our time and attention. We tend to think that the more choices we have in life, the happier we will be. But having too many options—choices about how to spend our time or what interests to pursue—can be overwhelming and can make us feel like we have less freedom and less time.
Adapted from Jeff Davidson, “Six Myths of Time Management”
Assignment: Is having too many choices a problem? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
My Essay:
In the human maze, one can face plenty of choices ,during his surviving but only one is suitable to solve life’s enigma and thus, achieving success and happiness .That’s why, I firmly believe that we shouldn’t have many choices.
The abundance of choices ,be it in school, in social life or in family is the mark of a superficial personality. In fact, I believe that people who, for example, want to drink, to read a novel, to go for walk, to practice sport just to entertain lack critical thinking, wisdom and straightforwardness. At this point, I ponder that those people must engage in a mind-blogging meditation to drown deeply in each choice, analyze it thoroughly , criticize its lapses and then make nothing but one choice because insofar as a person fails to make up his mind and pick a unique choice for him, he will fail to build a clear perspective in life , he will struggle to fit with his unreasonable lust to experience all the possible choices, though, he can not materialize any of them because he have no vision. That’s why I believe that the diversity in choices could lead a person to mental, illness, grief and despair.
For a broader perspective, I see that a government leading a nation, be it developed or under-developed country, who considers a lot of choices for economy, foreign policy or demography, is doomed to fail to achieve people’s dreams and aspirations. For instance, I believe that, this type of government will be the cause of a systematic mess in all fields. And at certain level of suffering or injustice, the country will explode, riots will topple the head of the state and chaos will reign. Arab Winter is case in point, from recent history. In fact after toppling dictators in Tunisia, Libya, Yemen and Egypt, fresh governments failed to stick to a clear plan that’s why chiefs were perplexed, lost and thus weak. They tried plenty of economic, social and financial choices without succeeding in any of them which caused stagnation in investments, a decline in GDP and a fall in states’ status. Finally, Arab people suffered again from the same dilemmas: more unemployment, more poverty and more hunger. That’s the high cost of having too many choices.
To conclude, I can assert that the diversity in interest can by no mean foster a sense of self-esteem and serenity for an individual and cannot be effective to stimulate the prosperity of a nation.
