<p>Hello! My name is Sasha and I'm 16. I'm currently a student in a french school, therefore english is not my mother tongue. I took my first SAT on May 2014 and achieved a score of 1900 which is good. Unfortunately, where I struggle most is in the essay section. I would really appreciate if you could read my essay and score it from 2 to 12 (if you could mention my strong and weak points, would be amazing!). Thank you xx</p>
<p>ESSAY PROMPT: What are your thoughts on whether it matters if a person stops setting goals and dreams for himself or herself?</p>
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<p>Goals and dreamshave tha ability to change someone’s life. They are, therefore, crucial for a person to have something to live for. Ambition has led to Revolutions, to celebrities’ ascent and to the making of masterpieces. </p>
<p>For examples, the French Revolutioni is one transformation that was guided by people’s dreams of a better society. In 1789, and in the years that followed, there was a constant struggle for equal rights for every french citizen: only higher classes had to access to privileges. Due to thousands of people’s aspirations, a Constitution was finally written, declaring equality amongst all citizens. Centuries later, the French government continues to use this Constituion to create laws and rights equitable for everyone. People’s ambitions led to this Revolution and consequently to the society we all know and cherish today. </p>
<p>A very famous example of a celebritie’s ascent is Cristiano Ronaldo. Ronaldo is a portuguese soccer player that only had one goal: become the best in the world. Unfortunately, he was born in an impoverished family and had to train harder than any other player. A couple of years later, he became a proficient player and his skills were rapidly noticed. In 2003, he was signed for a 15 millions euros contract with Manchester United. Since, his career boosted quickly: Ronaldo is now the highest paid soccer player and his estimated wealth is about 200 millions euros. His goals and dreams made him who is today.</p>
<p>Literary examples also demonstrate how important it is for someone toset dreams for himself. Les Misérables written in 1862 by Victor Hugo. This masterpiece follows the lives of several characters who live in a penurious and dishonest society. Fantine, for example, was a poor woman who had to give away her daughter, Cosette, in order to provide for her a better life. Unfortunately, the family in which Cosette stayed, demanded an increasing amount of money by deceiving Fantine into thinking her daughter was ill. Fantine ended up penniless due to the family’s greed. Victor Hugo had only one goal: change people’s view of their society by writing a realistic point of view of a lower class. In the nineteenth century, his book was severily criticized because it brought a new perspective on society. Nowadays, it is considered one of the greatest books ever written due to its depiction of a deprived nation.</p>
<p>These three examples show that is important to have dreams and goals in order to accomplish something. Indeed most of history’s successes were created by an ambition born in every human being’s mind.</p>
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<p>PS: it is only a first draft.</p>