Score My SAT Essay (have a couple of questions too)

<p>Please help me score my SAT essay and give out any pointers.
I took the advice of one of the thread's (<a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/645763-how-write-12-essay-just-10-days.html%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/645763-how-write-12-essay-just-10-days.html&lt;/a&gt;) and those of a couple of friends)</p>

<p>Question/Prompt
We do not take the time to determine right from wrong. Reflecting on the difference between right and wrong is hard work. It is so much easier to follow the crowd, going along with what is popular rather than the disapproval of others by voicing an objection of any kind.
Is it always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, or can we benefit from following the crowd? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and example taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Essay:
It is always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than to follow the norms of society. Guy Montag, from Fahrenheit 451, in his pursuit of knowledge, Atticus Finch, from To Kill a Mockingbird, in his defense of Tom Robinson , and Gandhi’s support for the Allied Power’s during World War Two are all prime examples of how it is always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than to follow the norms of society. </p>

<p>Guy Montag, from Ray Bradbury’s dystopian novel, Fahrenheit 451, is the epitome of how it is always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than to follow the norms of society. Fahrenheit 451, is set in an utopian society in which the people are fed mass media propaganda and the reading of literature is banned. However, Montag, goes against the constraints of society because he believes that reading books not only brings him happiness but also enlightenment. By reading books, Montag, must also face the consequences of persecution from the government. As a result, Montag is forced to find refugee at a camp for book reader’s like himself, who have escaped from the utopian society. If Montag did not determine how is own view of right and wrong and decide to not read books, his life would be full of misery and lacking in knowledge. </p>

<p>Atticus Finch, from Harper Lee’s, To Kill a Mockingbird, is another literary example of how it is always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than to follow the norms of society. To Kill a Mockingbird takes place in Alabama during the Great Depression in which society is prejudice to African American’s. Atticus Finch, the father of the protagonist, is a attorney with high moral standards, who decides to take the case of Tom Robinson, who has been falsely accused of rape. By taking Tom Robinson’s case, Finch, risks harassment from the community he lives in, but insists on taking Tom Robinson’s case, as he believes it is the correct thing to do. If, Atticus Finch, did not take up Tom Robinson’s case, Atticus Finch would not only be falling to the pressure of the prejudice society but he would be also going against his own morals. </p>

<p>Gandhi, in his support of the Allied Powers during World War Two, is a historical example of how it is always best to determine one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than to follow the norms of society. Gandhi, was an Indian activist, who believed in fighting for India’s independence through peaceful protests. During World War Two, The United Kingdom was at war with Germany. Because of their hate for their British oppressor’s, many Indian activist’s, pledged support for the Axis powers and even served in their military’s. However, Gandhi, took a different approach to the matter and showed support for the British government. Although, Gandhi and the British government often did not come to terms, Gandhi still decided to pledge allegiance to the British government, because he believed the actions of the German government at the time were to be frowned upon. If Gandhi, had not supported the British government but instead supported the German government during World War Two, not only would Gandhi have been going against his own ideas but he would also have had changed the course of India’s independence. </p>

<p>After a careful analysis, of Guy Montag in his pursuit of knowledge, Atticus Finch in his defense of Tom Robinson, and Gandhi in his support of the British government during World War Two, determining one’s own view of right and wrong, rather than following the norm’s of society is indeed crucial to becoming a better individual. Had Guy Montag, Atticus Finch, and Gandhi fallen to the pressures of society, the outcomes of their stories may have been a lot different.</p>

<p>Questions I wish to ask:
Is it better to have only 2 examples or 3 examples?
Are the if something-something parts needed in my essay? My friends highly recommend I use them</p>