Short answer critique

[lalala927]

<p>Can anyone give me some feedback on my short answer for the common app?</p>

[luckymint]

<p>I'll help out. pm me if you like.</p>

[damiensdogs]

<p>you can send it over to me too. ill help</p>

[ultimateslacker]

<p>i'd love to help</p>