Short Umich Supplement Essays. Can anyone critique/revise them please?

<p>I have two essay for michigan that i am almost finished with, one is a 250 word essay about diversity, and the other is a 450 word essay about what i want to do at Michigan. Can anyone read over them and offer some input before i send them this week?</p>

<p>bump…</p>

<p>sure PM it.</p>

<p>sure i would also like to read it to compare it with mine, altho i have already applied. if u want to see mine to compare them, let me know</p>

<p>I would be happy to make suggestions.</p>

<p>ya just PM me</p>

<p>Yeah, sure; PM it to me.</p>

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<p>send it over :)</p>