<p>My essay prompt yesterday was the one regarding diversity- I took a pro-diversity stance. </p>
<p>I'm a very proficient writer, but my problem is this- I didn't know CB wanted examples.......so my essay was very example-deficient.</p>
<p>I used a lot of sexy vocab, such as preclude, conducive, amalgamation, stymie, tantamount, facilitate, malleable, deleterious, monobehavioral, advantageous- all very appropriately. </p>
<p>I only had one example! It was a historical one, I refered to HItler and the Third Reich, how he sought to eliminate diversity because a uniform society was superficially attractive in the sense that it was more malleable. </p>
<p>Summary: I had a good thesis, strong reasoning in my first P, a weak second P, a good third P with a historical example, and a good conclusion.</p>
<p>Can I still manage an 11?</p>
<p>it's hard to predict your score without actually seeing your example.
from what you claim to have done, it looks fine. I don't know about a 11 because you only had one example, but probably at least 9.</p>
<p>That is so BS though, is solid reasoning not substantive enough for them? Won't they be sick of seeing "My brother cheated on a math test so he learned not to cheat" and "in this book, X does Y"</p>
<p>Will they not find my essay refreshing after reading so many trite examples?</p>
<p>Same thing happened to me.</p>
<p>My Prep book neglected to mention that I had to use concrete examples, so I wrote my essay as I normally would, paying special concern to the soundness of my argument, but not including incredibly substantive examples. You can really only provide some weak anecdotal evidence in these types of essays (where you lack credible sources and have to work impromptu), so I just alluded to some statistics and left it at that. Regretting it now though. :(</p>
<p>I did discuss how the US was this diverse melting pot and how in Europe where freedoms of speech and the like are protected there also exists a higher average GDP and standard of living, and how in China (cultural revolution) and in the Middle East people are on average sadder because the governments do not allow for much diversity.</p>
<p>If they're looking for uber-specific examples though, it's going to suck, unfortunately.</p>
<p>I feel greatly relieved- I just looked at CB's website. Both the 6 essays used only one (albeit extended) example. My Hitler paragraph was fairly long, and the rest of the essay was solid reasoning.</p>
<p>I don't think we should worry, we're both competent writers.</p>
<p>You should be fine. Examples are obviously important, but a good thesis, masterful use of quality vocab, and good writing fluency should compensate.</p>
<p>You really shouldn't worry about your essay, though. Worry about your multiple choice. Getting 80 on that is much more important than a 11 or a 12 on the essay.</p>