Someone please give me feedback on UC Prompt 1 essay?!

<p>It's about overcoming (minor) hardship and becoming "aware" and things like that... I don't even know. I think it sounds like I'm trying way too hard to sound knowledgeable about world events and stuff. Let me know and I'll PM you the Google Docs link! Thank you!</p>

<p>Hi, I can take a look.</p>