<p>yea thanks. I was having trouble at the end because their is a 600 word limit and it was right at 600. can u sorta like give me an idea on how to change the last lines without going over the limit?</p>
<p>oh and by the way i was thinking the glass slipper was the writing</p>
<p>(1) clean up the first long PP and you'll lose a bunch of words there. Don't repeat any information and tell the tale as economically as possible without losing important details.</p>
<p>Also break this PP into a couple of PPs for a more readable feel. </p>
<p>(2) Conclusion : didn't I say just so already, above?</p>
<p>It just needs to say-- Little did you know that the retreat you used to avoid conflicts w/ your 'steps'-- books & words-- would turn out to provide your ultimate path to freedom-- educational excellence. Explain that you yearn to get started in your next phase of life out from under these difficulties, and that the "glass slipper" for your Cinderella story would be a fat envelope admitting you to the college that fits you perfectly. I think you can do all this in three or four sentences.</p>
<p>BUT DONT FORGET to set this aside and revise, revise, revise to make it as well-written as possible.</p>