The Stanford community is deeply curious and driven to learn in and out of the classroom. Reflect on an idea or experience that makes you genuinely excited about learning. (100 to 250 words)
I lie board out of my mind on the first day of high school in my science class. Although, what sparked my curiosity and attention was that the teacher was reading off the syllabus and it had so do with how the world works, and that science has an answer for everything in the world, no exceptions. This was the first day that I realized my burning love and passion for science. I actually stayed after class and asked the teacher if he would mind if I stayed after class to try out a few of the experiments that he had mentioned. He didn’t mind, so I went on and tried the physics experiment in which I built a “spinner” which I put into a beaker filled in water to create a twister within the water. I then tried to make elephant toothpaste, that worked. I proceeded to try out more and more experiments until he finally said “It’s 6 o’clock, time to go home.” By that time, my curiosity in the way that I had perceived the world surrounding me was instantaneously changed forever. I would stay after school almost every day trying new experiments and seeing if my hypothesis was correct, how to write a great research paper on a chemistry experiment, biology lab, or even a physics “egg drop test.” I have never been the same since. The day I fell in love with science was September 5, 2017. I will never forget my “science anniversary.”
Do you think I stand a chance in the admissions process?
@MrElonMusk I will be graduating early by one year so I think that this is a good time to start looking for college essays and constructing them. Also, I’m not too worried about somebody copying it. Nobody will do that.
You have a few spelling and grammatical errors in your story. I think your story is OK, but I feel like it’s a little cliché and the writing didn’t seem very elegant. Good luck!!
Even if no one would copy it (which is pretty naive of you to assert), plagiarism checkers will find this and AOs will have no way of knowing it’s your post, so they will just assume you copied it, unless you get a mod to take it down now.
Yes, I think you “stand a chance.” Of course, we have no idea of your grades or SATs or finances or of anything else, but I’m the kind of girl who buys the occasional lottery ticket. I believe in chances.
But this essay is shot now. I haven’t even read it; I don’t need to. It’s in the plagiarism checkers. Even if it’s not well enough written for someone to steal, it’s in the system. You can’t use it.
You definitely want to ask somebody to read your essays before you send them. There are several grammatical errors and it doesn’t flow very well. That would be reason #1 for them to look at another candidate. Board is a piece of wood. Bored is when you don’t have anything to do.
A hint: it reads passive in that all you do is recreate someone else’s experiments in your hs setting. No mention of more, how you graduated from this to other sci experiences a Stanford will expect. Remember, show not just tell. All you’re showing here is you found a cookbook. Think about it.