Supplement Essay Help

<p>Hi, Im filling out the Cornell Supplement on the Common Application and wanted to know how this essay sounds:</p>

<p>It's in response to
College of Human Ecology: What do you value about the College of Human Ecology perspective as you consider
your academic goals and plans for the future? Reflect on our majors that interest you as you respond.</p>

<p>Helping others and serving my community has always been a top priority in my life, which has laid the foundation to the path in life I want to take. Cornell’s elite College of Human Ecology would not only maximize my knowledge of human behavior and mechanism, but shape my dreams and aspirations to guide me into the career I’ve always longed for.
With majors from Nutritional Sciences to Fiber Science and Apparel Design, there is no doubt this college encloses the major I wish to pursue. Any major in this college would most definitely augment a student’s view of the way we live. Throughout high school, biology has captivated my mind in every aspect and has aided me in working with others through the follow up in diseases and our body as a whole. Through my father’s death caused by diabetes type 2 and addiction to alcohol, I seek to ensure I never go through another life adversity by promoting health and the importance of it. Growing up, I saw my father be consumed in a vise that dramatically impacted my family as a whole and made my life unfold in such a way I never expected it to.
In my internship at a hospital I have received the opportunity of working in various departments that has made me realize I am most interested in curing those with long term conditions such as diabetes and cancer. My level of maturity and ability to communicate with others has greatly increased since there’s no room for fooling around in such a serious setting that requires full attention and thinking on one’s feet all the time. Working with professionals has tapped into my inner desire to devote myself to the field of medicine to someday be the pioneer of many cures to diseases and conditions that so negatively affect united families.
With leading researchers as faculty and notable alumni, the College of Human Ecology has that resonance that makes many aspiring students make every effort at their capacity to obtain a spot in. I have deliberately grown both as a person and scholar from the beginning of high school to now, and have set my mind in what I want to achieve and overcome the trials and tribulations I have encountered. Having an experienced background in helping others, the Human Biology, Health, and Society major stands out to me the most. What I look for in a school is not how well known it is, or how many people attend a football game, but the experience it offers and how prepared it leaves its descendants. This college is astounding in the fact that it gives rise to the next set of leaders in medicine that will someday save thousands of lives in every corner of the
planet not only through a top of the line research based education, but through its mission to apply what is learned to solve life’s challenges.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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