Transfer application essay: Need help

<p>I am applying as a transfer student, and would really appreciate if I had some pair of eyes to help me look it over. I am in a sticky situation, so I really need my essay to be in its best condition. I need help in making my essay stand out, so feel free to give some harsh constructive criticism if you need to. Please let me know and I can send it to you.
Thank you very much in advance!</p>