Transfer Essay Proofread?

Hey,
Would anyone want to help me proofread my transfer essay? I am right now a freshman ME student(1 semester) attending CUNY City College and I want to transfer to Stevens Institute of Technology. If you guys have any pointers or tips on both the school or the essay.
I applied to Stevens as Senior in HS.(If that helps at all)
Transfer Stats:
College GPA: 3.2
HS GPA: 3.7
College Clubs: CCNY Robotics coding with Arduino
Activities: Volunteered (senior in HS) + Worked at same place(summer before college)
Thanks!

Send it to me, I can help! I have done a lot of research on transfer essay, I wrote mine UNC specific.