u of chicago supplement essay help :)

<p>The man behind the desk shuffled through my paperwork, scanning one page, tossing it to the side and then moving on to the next. His expression was unreadable, if anything, it was pretty cold. After flipping through the rest of my application, the bald man peered down at me with his large, circular glasses that hung at the tip of his nose. Despite his strict appearance, I stood pin straight in the hard, leather chair, and kept my head up. </p>

<p>“You look a little small for your age. Do you think you can handle this job?” the man asked. </p>

<p>Mr. Davis’ comment was quite offensive and his question a slap in the face. Again, I was being judged incorrectly according to my height. At the time, I had just turned sixteen and was applying for my first internship at the Law Office of Frank Davis. I had been preparing for this day for weeks, possibly even months. Prior to this day, I had contacted nearly every law firm and office in my area, hoping to land an internship. I’ve always been fascinated with the law and wanted to gain more experience in the field. Finally, the secretary for Mr. Davis called me and asked me to come in for an interview. I was ecstatic. I got together my short resume, transcript, and letters of recommendation. My mother bought me a whole suit with the cutest blazer and pinstripe pencil skirt.</p>

<p>“I’m extremely motivated and I know this is what I want to do. Actually, I’ve been looking for an internship for weeks now…”</p>

<p>After giving me a hard look, Mr. Davis decided to give me the internship. I interned there for only three months, but by time the internship had ended, Mr. Davis and I had become good friends. He was definitely unsure about hiring me at first. Mr. Davis even admitted to me during a train ride to the Queens Supreme Court that he had underestimated my ability to do an efficient job working in a law office because of my small height. </p>

<p>I presently stand at 4 feet and 11 inches and am 17 years old. My height has always been a stumbling block no matter where I go or what I do. The first thing anyone notices about me is how short I am. And because I’m so tiny, I can’t be taken seriously, my mind is not mature enough and my thinking is limited. As ridiculous as it sounds, it is very realistic. My height has set me back. My teachers, peers, and even family members tend to treat me as if I were a porcelain doll in danger of being cracked into thousands of pieces the moment she drops to the ground.</p>

<p>However, despite the fact that I am “fun sized”, my stature has also been a factor in my motivation to succeed. Not only do I want to do well for myself, but I want to show all those who have doubted me because of my size, that I am capable of doing everything a regular sized person could. </p>

<p>I like to compare myself to Napoleon Bonaparte, one of my favorite people in history. As controversial as he is, Napoleon accomplished many things in his 51 years of life. Who else can claim that they’ve been Emperor of France, King of Italy, and conqueror of a number of nations while being a little over five feet tall? </p>

<p>In the same way, I have made great strides in 17 years. I’ve sung at the Metropolitan Opera, won a number of AG Bible Quiz championships, interned at a law office, and worked for a local congressman. The list goes on and on. Most people are surprised at how much I’ve been able to do. They never would’ve thought that I could. However, I have pushed myself to go the extra mile and I’m not stopping there. </p>

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<p>What do you guys think? Is it a stupid topic? Is it risky to compare myself to Napoleon (I actually like the guy)? Is there more I should add? The topic was to talk about your worst enemy. It's also 649 words long :) Thanks :)</p>

<p>The last part is a listing of ECs which is not pretty when you’ve already given them a list in your common app. I personally look at Napoleon and think of Saint Helena and an over ambitious person, but I don’t think it’s gutsy to use him. I think it’s a well written essay, but realize that there are a lot of short people who can write pretty similar essays to yours. My recommendation is thinking about writing something creative. I had fun and wrote about Waldo the existentialist. Try to make ur Uchicago essay something that can’t be reused for another college app, something that no one else is going to think of writing and always have fun :D. It’ll be a lot more effective that way. GL and hope I see you at the admitted students meeting in Jan!</p>

<p>I don’t like the ending. It seems like the common listing your resume sort of deal. Also it might not be the wisest choice to keep your essay here for everyone to see.
@ Wendeli- I too wrote about Waldo and existentialism! It was only one line saying Waldo began to think about existentialism though.</p>

<p>lol Midosin, I did my essay on waldo with the personality of emerson. Now I’m wondering how many people did existentialism for their essay >.<</p>

<p>I got in and I wrote about the Heisenberg one. I think that you could find a more creative approach. Mine was really serious, but I don’t think that too many other people had a similar essay. Try thinking of a topic that will show you in a unique light.</p>

<p>The ending ruined it… This is a list, not creative. Redo it. and remember SHOW, not tell. you are telling.</p>

<p>Showing might be: I have always looked up to people, literally. Even when I wear ridiculous platform shoes, I still am an ant compared to my classmates. instead of this: I presently stand at 4 feet and 11 inches and am 17 years old. My height has always been a stumbling block no matter where I go or what I do.</p>

<p>I suggest choosing a different topic? Try the waldo one. My idea ( i didn’t use this): write about Waldo as a Australian park ranger who has a pretty normal life with Carmen Saindego.</p>

<p>Well I tried to show in the first part of the essay and then go on to explaining. I wasn’t too happy with the ending either. If I cut it out, would the essay be okay? And I hate the Waldo one. I seriously don’t want to strain my brain trying to think of a clever approach to that one…</p>