UC essay#1/2 Please give me some advice

[thewest]

<p>Hi, I need some advice on my personal statements for the UC application. </p>

<p>I completed the first 2 (short)..</p>

<p>Can anyone give me some advice..?</p>

<p>Thanks...</p>

[ultimateslacker]

<p>i can help, pm me</p>

[extemporaneous]

<p>i'll read it</p>