UC Prompts #1 and #2 Feedback Please

<p>Hello, I have my rough draft done for both UC prompts and I would like some help. I was wondering if there was anyone that would like to read my prompts and make edits/suggestions to my essays. Thank You!</p>

<p>I can help</p>

<p>i can help</p>

<p>DO NOT send to a) high school seniors b) people with very few posts.</p>

<p>I am a freshman at penn, and would be glad to read (just finished midterms!)</p>

<p>I was accepted at all UC’s last year (with the expection of merced and riverside because I didn’t apply.</p>

<p>You should not give your essays blindly to anyone, they can use your hard work.</p>