<p>...When our score reports come out. This way the future generation can see what makes an essay a 7 or a 9 or a 12, or this way we can see if an essay falls out of pattern so the person can rescore. Anyone else up for this on June 25th?</p>
<p>yes we should do this</p>
<p>you could have posted this thread on june 25th!!!</p>
<p>We can intergrate essays from previous tests as well (meaning you could set it up before the 25th)</p>
<p>OK this is for any test- march,may june.
KEEP IN MIND THAT WE ALL WANT TO SEE SCORES OF ANY KIND. This is so we can learn and see if the scoring is fair. Don't be afraid to post your essay if you have <em>anything</em> from a 2-12. </p>
<p>Please post your
1) Test date, and if you are the first one to post with your test date, then post the prompt;
2) your grade (with asteriks);
3) your essay;
4) Afterwards, post the link to the essay... try to figure it out; it should be in the source code.
**** if you see any mistakes, do not correct them when you retype. this will be less illustrative, of course</p>
<p>1) TEST: June
PROMPT: Assignment: Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past and succeed in the present? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>2)<strong><em>GRADE: 12</em></strong></p>
<p>3)
(Indent)Often, to remember is to suffer. Memories remind us of our past mistakes, both caused by our own imperfections and by the the imperfections of the human community as a whole. It is tempting, ten, to say that these bitter recollections only harm us, drowning our self-esteem and our dreams for the future. However, it is necessary to never forget, lest we repeat our errors. The novels Crime and Punishment, and Brave New World, and my personal experience uphold the veracity of this claim.
(Indent)Raskolnikov, the unlikely hero of Dostoyevsky's finest novel, commits a gruesome murder in his twisted sense of righteousness and good. In the aftermath of this travesty, Raskolnikov tries his hardest to forget his wrongdoing, hiding out in his room, and suffocating in his guilt. It soon proves impossible. Raskolnikov, as expected, grows into a state of deathly anxiety and paranoia, continuing to harm those who love him. In the last chapters of the novel, however, he finally realizes the importance of coming to terms with the past and learning from his "mistakes." He then confesses. And though his confession put him into the jails of Siberia, he was able to continue in stride with the knowledge that he could now succeed. The epilogue ends the novel on a positive note, illustrating how Raskolnikov learned from his memories, and was able to leave Siberia with the promise of success.
(Indent)Brave New World is a portrayal of the dystopia that is created from ignorance of the past. The 'victims' of this "world" cause harm to one another, as because of their cynicism of the past- they claim "history is bunk"- they cannot remember how it feels to be hurt or what the effects of pain are. To further their mindlessness, or as these drones claim, to be "happy," the citizens of this dystopia take "soma," a drug that allows them to forget their pains. So, not only does the ignorance propagate harm, but it also depletes necessary human emotion. For, as it is seen by the drones of Brave New World pain is necessary for inner growth and true success and happiness.
(Indent)Of course, my experiences through life have shown me the importance of memory. Not only do I remember beautiful events- Hailey's Comet, my sister's birth- but I also have the satisfaction of known I've grown as a human and succeeded. For instance, as a child I was callous and gossipy, but now I have learned from my wrongdoings and am more happy as a result.
(Indent)Crime and Punishment, Brave New World and life's experiences [show that memories] are necessary to the growth and success of humankind.</p>
<p><a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.com/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?pageNum=1%5B/url%5D">https://nsat.collegeboard.com/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?pageNum=1</a>
<a href="https://nsat.collegeboard.com/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?pageNum=2%5B/url%5D">https://nsat.collegeboard.com/satweb/scorereport/essayImageAction.do?pageNum=2</a></p>
<p>Maybe it would make sense (for someone who is better with these sorts of things) to put together a website for this infomation. Also maybe this thread should be stickied (is that the term?) to the top of this board.</p>
<p>1) TEST: March
Assignment: Is the opinion of the majority-in government or in any other circumstances-a poor guide? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>2) <strong><em>GRADE: 10</em></strong></p>
<p>3) TEST OF ESSAY</p>
<p>Accidentally ommited text needed for clarity added in "[]".</p>
<p>_____The majority opinion, the foundation of American democracy, is a vital resource in shaping policy. The majority tells us, in great detail, the standard way of thinking for a people. However, is the majority always equivical [to] the best? Are there times when the majority can be wrong? Yes, however without concent from the majority choas can result. Therefore, when viewing the opinion of a majority, we must strike a balence between what is right and what is popular.</p>
<p>_____Take the aforementioned Christopher Columbus, and the majorities opinion of him. The majority view this man as a kind of century-old superhero. Yet, many in the majority are not aware of the absolute genoside committed by Columbus. The native population of Hisponola is estimated to have been approximently 16,000 men, women and children. Tragically, within just a few years of Columbus' landing, almost all of these people had perished. Would the majority view Columbus as a hero if it knew of the reality? Likely not, and conversly, the masses view does not change who Columbus was? This is an example of a case where the majority remains a poor guide.</p>
<p>_____Later in American history, the view of the many played a vital [role] and the, a groups rufusal to follow it cost thousands of lives. The Cival War was a battle of a minority, against a majority in which the majority clearly prevailed. The South, despite the North's half-hearted acceptance of slavery, decided to suceed from the Union because the Noth held a majority of the power. The South pointed to a northern majority electing Lincoln, despite his absense from Southern ballots. By the South denying this majority they, in essense, fought a needless war because the strong willed Northen army defeated the South, returned it to its minority status, and spent thousands of lives. This war shows how at times the will of the majority is a crucial guide.</p>
<p>_____What can we learn from this study of the majority in American history? We learn that the majority should be respected but always challenged in its beliefs.</p>
<p>LENGTH: 2 PAGES</p>
<p>4) LINKS:</p>
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<p>As you can see, my essay had examples; but had a lot of missing words, spelling and grammer errros (I ran out of time just as I was finishing it, no time to edit). Still a 10 is a decent score so they likely overlooked the errors for the most part.</p>
<p>**<em>P.S..... I don't feel like editing my post but i did not have any spelling errors on the actual test. I repeat I DID NOT HAVE ACTUAL ERRORS ... just for clarification. *</em></p>
<p>Alright, bump</p>
<p>ildjing: posting ur link to CB's link doesnt' work as it requires a password.</p>
<p>DmctNY8: nice handwriting...lol</p>
<p>JUNE SAT: Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn from the past and succeed in the present?
Received a 12 Length 2 pages</p>
<p>I will never forget Coach McClamrock's words: "Men we deserved to lose. We made too many mental mistakes. We had a great game plan but we didn't follow it. And most important of all, they wanted to win more than we did."</p>
<p>Coach McClamrock's words hurt because I knew they were true. Although we had a great football team we deserved to lose the championship game. I was just a sophomore and I vowed that next season would be different. The bitter memory of our defeat would inspire us to rededicate ourselves and win the championship.</p>
<p>The weeks turned to months and the new football season arrived. I was the quarterback and co-captain of our team. We were unified in our resolve to avenge our defeat and win state. We were indefatigable and indomitable.</p>
<p>At first, everything went perfectly. We were invincible as victory followed victory followed victory. Everyone predicted we would easily win the championship. But success can lead to complacency. We were becoming too overconfident. Our team was forgetting the lessons and memories of the past. Even though we had the best coaches, even though we had the most talent, and even though we had the most fervent fans, I knew something was wrong. I had to do something. So I did.</p>
<p>I called a players only meeting hours before the championship game. The room was dark and for once everyone was silent. No one knew it, but I saved a DVD of our loss just one year ago. Without saying a word, I turned on the TV monitor. The whole team's attention was riveted to the screen as we relieved our worst nightmare.</p>
<p>Seeing the DVD galvanized the entire team. As I hoped, the memory of our defeat fired up the entire team. Later that night, we stormed onto the field and played the game of our lives. I learned a very valuable lesson. Memories can help people overcome the past and succeed in the present.</p>