What about my essay?

<p>The Perfect Essay
[right]"Many big people were chasing me. I didn't know what to do. So I thought I would surprise them and throw it."
--Garo Yepremian, Miami placekicker, after a disastrous attempt to throw a pass in the Super Bowl[/right]</p>

<p>I’m a very smart guy and although my scores might not be the highest you’ve seen, I deserve to get into your school. Everybody around me told me that my chance for getting into a good college is into my interesting extracurricular activities and my essay. The first one is easy -- I’m an interesting person with interesting extracurriculars. I can create computer software (not programs; the difference is that the math guys don’t know anything about usability engineering and marketing). I’ve a Web site (check <a href="http://www.smilyanov.net%5B/url%5D"&gt;www.smilyanov.net&lt;/a&gt;) loaded with interested stuff I’ve created. I can be useful in the cycling and in the skiing teams. I’ve a good sense of humor, and I like to help people. I’ve, I can... But I can imagine how many people with great ECs, with high SATs, and with rich parents apply for your College.</p>

<p>I forget to mention that I’m also interested in reading essays. Essays I read vary from self-improvement problems, pass through more general topics, and go to various programming-related topics. Ouch, but what about my application essay? Everybody told me that I was capable of inventing a wonderful essay, because they knew that I’m very smart and in particular I liked essays. Anyway, I couldn’t. Why?</p>

<p>There is a very common phrase in school: “you know that you don’t know anything”. I think that if you are smart enough, you can realize that it’s not just some kind if an excuse of teenage girls trying to skip the next class. It is valid during your whole life. The more knowledge you accumulate, the more illiterate you feel you are. You can guess what happens when you are smart, perfectionist, and you like essays. You try to do something impossible -- you want to create a masterpiece. And this seems so natural and so reachable for you that you tend to do it instinctively. Even now, when I admit it, I can’t fix it.</p>

<p>Another obstacle to start is the freedom you have. In the Common Application there are some predefined blurry topics that seem to be specially designed to make you write either about the world peace, or about your autobiography (the things admissions officers hate most). But when you’re smart, you obviously will choose the last one: “other…”. You want to write something that is (a) very different from the dumb essays others give, (B) very interesting for the admissions officers, and ( c) it must present you just as yourself. Separately these tasks are relatively easy, but they must be completed together -- into only one essay. Sure, I can tell you something interesting about computers: do you know that programs must be written for people to read and only incidentally for machines to execute (a quote from an MIT professor)? Or that the Computer Science is closer to Psychology than to Math?</p>

<p>The problem is that I don’t know whether it will be interesting for you, but even if it is -- there is another one, much bigger problem. I don’t want to get into a college due to my wonderful, amazing, and interesting essay about abstract computer stuff. I want you accept me because you know me, and I’m definitely not a nerd thinking only about computers (but I suppose you already know this, since I’m trying to impress you with an essay not with a DARPA recommendation).</p>

<p>You know that “essay” means an attempt. But an attempt to do what? To write something admissions officers want to read. Nope! This would be stupid even if the books didn’t mention that it really is. I think that it must be an attempt to present you. And how you can present you unless you don’t write about you? Voila, maybe after all I’ll have to send you my autobiography and it will be the perfect essay! Or there is no need?</p>

<h2>© 2005 Georgi Ruslanov Smilyanov. All Rights Reserved.</h2>

<p>So, what do you think? All opinions and comments are welcomed!</p>

<p>***?
is this supposed to be an essay?
no comment...sry</p>

<p>Hmmm, what's wrong?</p>

<p>Heh, that made me laugh. Thanks, dude.</p>

<p>Would anybody tell me something more consistent?! I'm targeting MIT and Cornell -- is this writing good enough for them?</p>

<p>ha ha, go away loser</p>

<p>Hmmm, don't you think that you have to impress admissions officers (with an unusual thinking, for example), not to tell them any (even right) answers?</p>

<p>Take the above -- I'll go to MIT or I'll die! There is no middle position. That's the essance of being unusual -- sometimes it's risky :-))</p>

<p>great, you're not funny. go away</p>

<p>Ok, still, I couldn't understand what is wrong with it?!</p>

<p>This essay is an insult to the CC community... Ban him! :D</p>

<p>Ok, you stated "very different from the dumb essays others give", would this one be special?</p>

<p>Also you misquoted aristotle--"you know that you don’t know anything”.</p>

<p>You are not suppose to literarly state that you are good at something, you are suppose to write an experience where you demonstrated that</p>

<p>Ok, I'm really sorry -- I do admit that I'm a bit harsh. Anyway, I'm ready to soften it, but not to throw out the initial idea.</p>

<p>bro im sorry
but your essay is not witty or funny, nor does it stand out
get bauld's book on writing the essay if you want to know how to write a good one</p>

<p>you also might not be mature enough to realize what admissions officers would think if they read that. </p>

<p>just get bauld's book and read some of those essays
those are standouts
this goes in the bin</p>

<p>I didn't even read your whole essay; I skimmed a few paragraphs. Throw out the initial idea, and write a real college application essay. You don't have the talent to write anything more creative or outlandish than the normal essay, so stick with that. Write about an intellectual experience or a hero or any other lame topic. But throw this essay out and delete this post. You do not want your essay and full name printed on the web for eternity.</p>

<p>he's trolling obviously</p>