what do you guys think of this limerick i wrote for the NYU supplement

Applying to College
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<p>(I just wrote it in like 10 minutes so feel free to bash it apart)</p>

<p>Hey you! Do not pester me with your ignorant words
Your fact less and narrow language act like girds
Sealing your mind to the beauty of diversity
Maybe you should have gone to New York University
Take a step towards knowledge and away from the herds</p>

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<p>ew, why NYU. its …bleh… :(</p>

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<p>I just think it would be cool to go to school in the city
whats wrong with it?</p>

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<p>what the heck?</p>

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<p>i thought limericks had more bouncy-type rhythms? or am i reading it wrong</p>

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<p>hmm I see how it could be to serious, I just read it in a bouncy way lol</p>

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<p>I re-read it like 5 times and can’t figure out a proper rhythm haha… it’s more like a standard poem than a limerick IMO</p>

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<p>do you mean its missing the AABBA pattern? or just the wording</p>

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<p>usually, to have a typical limerick rhythm, lines 3 and 4 have to be shorter.</p>

<p>The limerick packs laughs anatomical
In space that is quite economical,
But the good ones I’ve seen
So seldom are clean,
And the clean ones so seldom are comical.</p>

<p>it’s hard to describe over text, but to me, limericks always have a distinct flow. The AABBA pattern might be part of it, but I think it’s the length of those “B” lines</p>

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<p>I see, thanks for the tip!</p>

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<p>My understanding is that limericks require a rhyming scheme AABBA and a syllabic structure of 9-9-6-6-9.</p>

<p>I’d share mine but I don’t want cclolzftw stealing my sh it too. haha.</p>

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<p>haha yea my noob mistake with this website, i’ll never post anything again. but its chill i’m glad I only posted the ****ty first draft. My sister also read it and said it was too deep to be a limerick i think i’m just going to toss it out, thanks for the syllable tip though!</p>

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<p>I’m near positive he was joking, so don’t worry anyways. Your sister is right too. Limericks are traditionally witty and whimsical.</p>

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<p>do they really make you write limericks?</p>

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<p>You can write a haiku, limerick or other short poem (10 lines or less).</p>

<p>Here’s one I just whipped up. The last line doesn’t work well no matter how I tinker with it. I’m posting it because I’d never use it for admissions, but it’s still a fun one. </p>

<p>New York, New York, a city of smog
Everywhere you go, roads in a clog
But on one night a year
At the sound of reindeer
All are merry for dear ole egg nog</p>

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<p>I’m not joking. I’m submitting the supplement as we speak.</p>