What grade would you give this AP US History paper?

<p>After the April, 1865 surrender of General Robert Lee and the Confederacy’s end, the Congressional Republicans ushered in a phase in American history known as Reconstruction, aimed at reuniting the Northern and Southern states, and closing class differences between wealthy plantation owners and poor black laborers. Logically, the quote that “Reconstruction never had any chance in the south” is ultimately correct. Reconstruction was doomed to fail in the southern states because of grudges after the Civil war, fear of black takeover, the aftermath over the ruling of Plessy V. Ferguson, and Southern indoctrination of white supremacy from one generation to the next. </p>

<p>Although these reasons factually explain why Reconstruction failed, other outside factors should be taken into account. Primarily, Lincoln’s Democratic successor, Andrew Johnson was the former governor of Tennessee, slaveholder, and southern sympathizer, who opposed many strict Republican plans by vetoing Reconstruction related bills. Moreover, carpetbagger governments (Northern Republicans who were put in charge of the South) were hated by Southerners, and thus were somewhat ineffective.
First, Southern grudges against the Union from the lack of independence brought on by the carpetbag governments made them resistant to change that the North would bring. According to “Throwing off the Yoke of Reconstruction” Mrs. Jennie Coleman recalled her experiences with the end of Reconstruction movement. “Our section yielded to none in its support of the Red Shirt movement that elected Wade Hampton governor [of South Carolina]. The Hate of oppression and love of independence united these people to throw off the yoke of carpetbag government” (Document H). THis quote shows the lack of reconciliation towards Reconstruction policies made by Republicans in the South, and desire for a Democratic governor who would then undo many changes made by carpetbaggers.
Also, fear of Black takeover by wealthy whites made many efforts to put forward Reconstruction policies difficult. The cartoon by Thomas Nast, “The Odor of the [African American] is Offensive” shows a drawing of Southerners shunning Black laborers, yet the next drawing at the bottom reads, “All the Difference in the World” and portrays a white man cleaning the shoes of a wealthy black at a party. While this satire is meant to show that Southern opinions toward Reconstruction won’t matter, but it also gives credence to Plantation owner’s fears of takeover by their former slaves. In fact, these fears were so real, that many whites joined the Ku Klux Klan to intimidate and sometimes lynch African Americans, to keep them on the fringes of society. “Throwing off the Yoke of Reconstruction” provides a first-hand account of acceptance of the Klan by whites. “The women and older children would surmise that these men were Ku Klux members in hiding, and our romantic fantasies would sumrise their deeds” (Document H). Because of the fear of takeover, and by extension, tolerance of the KKK, many Radical Reconstruction efforts to put Blacks in charge of government failed because blacks feared the Klan’s violence.
Moreover, the aftermath of the ruling of “Plessy v. Ferguson” upheld Black Codes set up by Southern states to keep segregation alive. The High Court ruled in favor of segregation because “the object of the [13th] Amendment was to undoubtedly to enforce the absolute equality of the two races before the law, but, in the nature of things, it could not have been intended to abolish distinctions based on color” (Document D). The Supreme Court did not see a reason why the 13th Amendment should block Black Codes from taking effect. Lack of Integration by races in Public Places kept mutual feelings of hostility alive, and helped doom Reconstruction.
Finally, White-Southern indoctrination of supremacy over African Americans helped fail Reconstruction. Ella Gooding from “The Goodings Describe Reconstruction in South Carolina” says “The Ku Klux Klan was a necessary organization and did much to discharge ignorant Negroes” (Document G). These beliefs, combined with the fact that Blacks had been slaves for many generations, gave whites a feeling of superiority that did not end with the Civil War. Clearly, these beliefs did not allow people like plantation owners to accept the nature of Reconstruction, policies that would have balanced out the two races, and fixed income inequality.
In summary, Reconstruction was disastrous partially, if not completely, because of the attitude Southerners held toward radical social and economic changes in their society. Mainly, it failed because of grudges against the North, fear of black takeover, “Plessy v. Ferguson”, and feelings of White Supremacy.</p>

<p>Paragraph 2 is supposed to be an expansion on other factors, but then you switch back to the original factors you discussed. Thus I would move paragraph 2 to the end of the essay, right before your concluding paragraph.</p>

<p>In paragraph 3 (grudges against Northerners), you do not explain how the quote shows “lack of reconciliation towards Reconstruction policies.” You just say that it does. But I do not see that it does. You need a few more connective sentences to explain the context. You also don’t explain anything about Southern grudges against Northerners in this paragraph. You mention carpetbaggers a few times. Give us some explanation and context - give evidence of Southern grudges and explain why a grudge against Northerners would have any impact on Reconstruction.</p>

<p>In paragraph 4 (fear of black takeover), I think word use is partially confusing your point. You say that a political cartoon “gives credence” to white slaveowners’ fears of black takeover, but a political cartoon cannot do that. What could give some credence to the argument would be black former slaves getting elected to Congress (as they did during Reconstruction) - an actual event. A better explanation might also include the wealth redistribution policies Lincoln pursued. Actions like these granted political and financial power to black Americans and put them in a position to potentially “take over.”</p>

<p>The Plessy v. Ferguson paragraph could use the most work. You do not explain at all why you think the aftermath of this court ruling played a role in the failure of Reconstruction. You sort of allude to it - that the Black codes may have fostered hostility - but how? What do you mean by that? And why would continued hostility between blacks and whites contribute to the failure of Reconstruction? Explain.</p>

<p>In your final paragraph, you also do not explain much. Your last sentence says what you want to say, but you need to elaborate more. Why would white supremacist beliefs make it difficult for white plantation owners to accept Reconstruction? What kinds of actions did those white supremacists take to help the failure along?</p>

<p>If you mean what letter grade I would give the paper, probably a B-. It does have the makings of a great paper - I think your reasons are absolutely solid and the but the problems are primarily</p>

<p>-Lack of clarifying/explanatory sentences and statements from you. You have pulled some quotes from the documents without giving me YOUR analysis of why you think those quotes support your argument. You often have one sentence that begins to explain, but you leave off the rest. Your analysis is the most important part of the answer. Develop it more.
-Organization and clarity. Some parts of the essay are unclear, partially because of the organization of it. An example is the paragraph on the Supreme Court - I don’t understand what the story about Plessy v. Ferguson has to do with your argument that Reconstruction failed because of x, y, and z. The paragraph didn’t have any of x-z in it. If your point is that the Black Codes and Jim Crow laws in the South fostered hostility and kept alive notions of white supremacy, say that.</p>

<p>Secondary factors that will improve the essay:</p>

<p>-You have some structural and grammatical errors that make the essay hard to read in places. When I grade papers I do not consciously/deliberately deduct for individual grammatical errors, but I DO deduct when those errors impede the comprehension of the paper as a whole. Yours does. So please give yourself a couple extra minutes at the end of the essay to proofread and fix. The biggest problem is probably comma splices.</p>

<p>-Nuance. This is harder to describe, but the paper is all doom and gloom about Reconstruction. One of the important things I learned in APUSH is that Reconstruction is much more nuanced - actually, a lot of historians (especially Southern historians) like to characterize it as a complete failure, but there were some positive things that came out of it - black people were elected to Congress for the first time, for example, and there was some redistribution of resources to remedy some long-standing inequality in the South, although much of it was reversed.</p>

<p>While nuance isn’t 100% necessary, I find that students who employ it get better grades.</p>

<p>I agree with juliet that the second paragraph belongs closer to the end of the paper.</p>

<p>The way you cite sources is a little awkward and confusing. It is not clear to me whether Jennie Coleman and Ella Gooding are the authors of source materials you are citing directly, or subjects being cited by other authors. There are standard ways to cite sources, which you can learn by consulting a style manual or by studying examples that your teacher should be able to provide. </p>

<p>I do think this has the potential to be an “A” paper, but it still needs work.</p>

<p>I agree with the prior two, but it would also help if we knew what the requirements were for the paper…The one thing I see most is when people write wonderful papers that do nothing to address the requirement of the paper.</p>