I am a rising senior starting my essays. Considering all sorts of topics right now. Here is my problem…
I have vivid memories of being on the campus of my favorite college which is my dream school. It truly has been a passion of mine ever since I was little - following their players (and every single stat) and going to campus events. I even know the square footage and design elements of several unique buildings, the timeline of renovations, and so many details about its unique history and traditions. It’s crazy how obsessed I have been. I already feel like its home (my father and grandfather went there). I know its the right fit for me and what I want to do with my life. It has the right programs et cetera.
I want to write a narrative story - about one of those moments on campus – that will highlight me and talk about me. I know - show don’t tell. But I am worried it will sound like I am just saying these things to flatter THEM? The day I was born - the hat with their emblem went on my head. But I am sure I am not the only kid obsessed with their school – I wonder if they get tons of essays from kids saying how much they love it and remember it and already feel a part of it.
Should I pick a topic that does not include this passion just to be safe?
My stats are good but its still a reach since its competitive in my state.
Your Common App essay has to apply to all the schools you apply to. So this makes no sense in that context. If it is the “Why College X” supplemental essay, you could use some of this.
For Common App essay tips, look at the thread pinned to the top of this forum.
Even for a Why X essay, don’t creep them out. Write about the programs and ECs that appeal to you. And what you have to offer the college. You risk coming across as, believe it or not, having a shallow reason for attending. You have a bias since you were little, and might not be looking at it very rationally.
Oh Im sorry I thought you could submit different personal statements for different schools. I had planned to write one for this particular school and one for the others. Well I guess this is an easy answer then.
And yes the creep factor was what I was concerned about. I hadn’t thought about the bias angle.
In the supplemental essay you certainly can mention that your father and grandfather went there, that you have grown up loving the school but focus more on what attributes you can bring to the college and why it is a great fit for you.
As a bit of unsolicited advice, while I hope things work out as you hope, I’d recommend that you minimize the notion of having this one dream school and work to create a solid college list that includes reach, match, and safety schools that appear affordable (find out your parents’ budget and run the net price calculator for each school) and that you would be excited to attend. The people I see who get hurt by the college admission process are the ones who focus on one or two hyper-competitive schools and then don’t get in. Admissions have become much more competitive since your father applied to college. Recognize that there are many wonderful schools out there where you can have a great 4 year experience and get where you want to go in life.
Thanks, I have a list and am working on other options. I think I have about a 15- 20 percent chance of getting in to the one I want so I know I need to look around and give other schools a chance. It’s hard though.