First, I’d like to ask if anyone would be willing to read it? Please let me know, and I’ll send a PM. I feel it may be a little cheesy/embarrassing, but I still think that it does a good job showing off my potential.
For those who offer to read it, I have a few questions. Obviously, first would be how to make it better?
Also, I wrote this as an assignment for a leadership camp I went to. They did not give a prompt and just asked for a personal statement, so I’m not sure if it directly answers any common app questions. For those who read it, can you tell me what question it would fit under? And if not any, is there still a way I could use it? Because I do like it.
Thank you very much in advance, guys! 